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This is simply amazing. I wish I could review it, but I honestly can't think of anything to critique, so I'm not going to. I especially love your title, because of how clearly it shows that both of them are lying. Stroke of genius there.
thank you, thank you, thank you! have a blessed day <3
Your poem is simply heart touching and it has a feel to it.
What I like the best is the second stanza:
"another day,
another skip-a-beat pulse to keep--
for every obscenity he burns her with
brings a fresh wave of i-hate-you's
that dissipate in an endless ocean of
i will change for us; and she remains
because love is love is love".
Especially the last line .What I would suggest is this even though the poem perfect I think that somehow in the 3rd stanza the phrases somehow don't show a connection.I really don't know why but this is what I feel
Otherwise this is one good poem.
thank you!! i'll see what i can do about connecting the third paragraph more
Your poem is simply heart touching and it has a feel to it.
What I like the best is the second stanza:
"another day,
another skip-a-beat pulse to keep--
for every obscenity he burns her with
brings a fresh wave of i-hate-you's
that dissipate in an endless ocean of
i will change for us; and she remains
because love is love is love".
Especially the last line .What I would suggest is this even though the poem perfect I think that somehow in the 3rd stanza the phrases somehow don't show a connection.I really don't know why but this is what I feel
Otherwise this is one good poem.
No review, just writing to say how astounding your poem is and I cant wait to read more of your work. I am speechless.
i'm rather at a loss for words as well, friend. thank you so very much
This is so...I don't even know. I'm at a loss of words. You did so well interpreting your theme, your point, I just love it so much. A pang of jealousy is ringing from me, and I can't help it. I've dreamt of writing like this before- I STILL dream of being able to write like this. It flows perfectly, and the repeating pattern at the end of each stanza? Genius.
Your concept, your words, even the constant non-rhythmical, yet also slightly rhythmical, lines, and the DETAILS, oh, yes, the details. I love it all. It's such a good piece of work, and I don't even have any nit picks. I really hope others see this, just so they can see that you exist. You, an amazing writer, are one here, barely getting noticed for your amazing skills. I thrive to be at least half the author as you are. I also really enjoyed the 'no caps'. It gave a lot more meaning, if that makes sense, and it made me like it even more.
I really can't wait to see more from you!
~Shine
have mercy on my poor little heart, shiney. i can only take so much before i burst into happy tears :')
this was, by far, the kindest review i've ever recieved. ever. you really lifted my spirits in a bad time and i'm so, so thankful for that. i'm most likely going to read this over and over until i memorize it. maybe i'll frame it in my room x) thank you again and have a most wonderful day. <3
Awh! I'm so happy that this made you feel better!
It's really good. I've never experienced love, yet this made me feel like I was experiencing it. I'm really confusing I know, but this was extravagant. You really outdid yourself. I didn't see any errors. It was also a very smooth read. GOOD JOB! I just had to say that. Okay, well, anyways, good luck on your writing. May you find a four-leaf clover too!
believe me, i understand what you're saying haha. thank you for reading and leaving such a kind review/comment. it means the world to me
Your welcome!
It is beautiful. It has emotions which a couple share and the things they go through. I am too in a relationship with a guy but u know my parents hate him and I love him. The important part is after all your misunderstandings and fights would you be able to cope up with it and make it last long ,forever. It is only the wish of the couple to beautify the relation or to make it worse for each other. What I feel is that life is too short to have any fights or grudges, people should know the power of love and the joy which is eternal.
thank you for reading! grudges tend to hold us back. i wish you all the best with your parents and future endeavors
a well written peice which require a bit of correction...the last line "love is love is love" is creating a bit of feeling that love is a deep emotion.i love the basic concept of the poem but this unrymed version can improve if you get count on the number of lines in each phrase.. i m nt telling that they should be equal but at least you should merge the last two phrases because it will look good then.... i hope u understand... it is a nice art all the best for future ... keep writing and sharing your stuff... i have written a poem on teenage can u plz go and check it because i want you 2 review it plz
thank you for the help! i'll be sure to check your poem out.