Falling

Nice lyrical poem you have there, very nice. I like the idea behind this poem as well as how you've written it, with the first two stanzas singing of praise and love and then the last two, the gradual descent onto ground.

down

down

down

i was sitting on cloud nine with no reason

to fall back down to earth.

my bones would melt like candle wax

and i could do nothing but smile

i thought you were my everything.

you promised me your all.

boy, was i foolish to listen.

"up over the endlessly falling snow

and cheesy winter rhymes."

This is not something meant to be offensive, but "cheesy winter rhymes" is exactly what I think when I read your poem. Don't know if you meant it to be like that, but it actually fits well and I think it's good.

"i was blinded by infatuation--

hypnotized by pretty words.

how deceitfully gorgeous indeed."

This part, though, is definitely not cheesy, and is my favorite part as well. It really sums up the whole premise of your poem, and explains well the emotions and thoughts that I sense you are trying to convey with your work. A lot of people have "fallen" into this trap.

Thank you xDarkHeart27x!

The poem itself is very nice. It contains a nice rhythm, due to a combination of a consistent sentence length, and repetition. I especially liked the last line, "and I don't think you would've caught me." However this brings me on to my grammatical criticism, which should be easy enough to fix if you have the time.
1-All letter "I"s should be capitalized. I know its a small thing, but it bugs me.
2- This isn't a mistake, but I feel a little more punctuation would help keep a steady flow to the story. Not too much, just a little.
I hope neither of these discourage you, because this is a really nice poem.
Take That You Fiend!

Hello there,

Magenta here to review your poem, Falling, which I must tell you is well-written. Good job! There were a few things, however, that I would like to point out to you. I would first like to suggest capitalizing your letters, like "I" so that it your poem has proper spelling, grammar, and punctuation. At least one of your "I"s were capitalized which was probably changed by the autocorrect. It seemed distracting when reading because you started out with capitalizing them and then stopped halfway. I would also capitalize the first letter of each line because you use proper nouns and start new sentences. It would make the poem much better.

You wrote...

"baby, when I met you, I felt like I was floating--
up over the shiny tinsel rooftops
and oh-so-merry townsfolk."

I am not sure if I would use the word "tinsel", because I thought that it tinsel was a decorative material, not a material used for a rooftop. Did you mean tensile? Still, I don't see the reason for that line.

You wrote...

"baby i was fallin'
and maybe not in the good way."

I would suggest changing this a little bit. When you use "fallin'", it makes the poem less formal and it doesn't actually fit with the rest of the poem. It seems to casual for this type of poem and what it conveys. The next line,"and maybe not in the good way" is a bit confusing. I wasn't sure how you could fall in a good or bad way. Unless, did you mean falling in love? But the line still sounds strange when you write "maybe not". That kind of ruined the sentence. Please don't take the the wrong way, it just did not go with the flow of the poem. I would also use a word besides "baby" because it makes the poem more of a song. Other than that, I thought that you had a great poem. Terrific ending, I liked how wrote down going down. That added to the poem in a good way. Hope to have helped.

-Magenta