Young Writers Society

Hey I am here for a very short review.

It's been an century since I had completed the last chapter. Anyway, let's hwt right into it.

The play is getting interesting day by day and as well as mysterious. I should confess this is the first story of which I still remember the names of the characters. They seem to have done quite a good job at convincing the children all around. The children are gonna save the adults, the opposite happens normally.

Now, I have a doubt. Who was broadcasting that TV show? The adults of the country are in a very bad condition... Was that a robot controlling the broadcast of the TV show? Or maybe it was scheduled like that in a computer? I know the least about these broadcasting proccesses. *Sigh*

I am glad that the broadcast kind of went smoothly and oh! It was so funny. It's quite a hard task to show such a terrible situation in such a funny way. You two are nailing it. The most intriguing part is the military equipment. They have 0 equipments of their own. So, they will kind of have to steal and it will extremely hard because the military people too, I think are under the control of those people. And did those people see it? I hope they didn't because if they did, evil waiting in the fate of these children.

Keep Writing!!

~Forever

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review....good to see more of this out, I've been looking forward to this.

First Impression: Well, yet another really fun part here...looks like team jellybeans is making their first moves here and it was a success...and it was hilarious as always. Well...more details down below.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Setting: The news station

SEBASTIAN

Ok we're here! (Opens the door) Wow! This place is filled with technology! Ok, lets see... There! (Points at a camera and computer) We should be able to use that camera to send a broadcast to everyone in the USA! So if I do this and turn this it should... Yes, perfect! We should be going live in ten seconds! (Begins to fix hair and take a deep breath)

SEBASTIAN (Facing the camera)

Hello all! Before I begin talking I just want to apologize for interrupting your show! Especially if it was Fun With Jellybeans! But this is very important. Anyways my name is Sebastian White and just like all of you. My family has gone a littl- No. A lot coo-coo! And for those of you who don't know this is because of two very bad brothers. They have made them like this with their cookies. Anyways we need to stop them! To do this we need t- (The camera dies) What!

(A few seconds pass and the other kids start to mutter anxiously as they fiddle with the camera)

SEBASTIAN (A couple minutes later, broadcasting again)

Sorry! The camera died... But it is good now! But as I was saying to stop them we need to band together and make a team! If you are interested, which I will give you several reason why you should in a minute. You need to get to one of these three locations. Um... (Looks down at a piece of paper) Pittsburgh, Dallas, or Salt Lake City.

(The other children mess with the computer and a weather map pops up behind SEBASTIAN)

RANDOM KID

(shouts enthusiastically) Look at the map behind Seb! Pittsburgh is, um, in the upper right-ish corner, Dallas is...uh... (consults with another kid) in Teexas! Oops, Texas. And Salt Lake City is in that pointy-looking state on the left! (hops in front of the camera and points to the map) You guys can use your parents' cars to get to those places, and you should also have a map or uh.. gips? gups? (whispers to another kid) Yeah! A GPS! (grins at the camera and gives two thumbs ups) Hope you all get there! Also please don't crash your cars! (runs behind the camera again) (faintly) All yours, Seb!

SEBASTIAN

Thank you! And as for those reasons there are three fantastic ones! Number 1! There is a chance that you might be able to control some heavy-duty military equipment! Doesn't that sound fun! (Waves arms around to enhance the effect, excited pew-pew noises come from off-screen) Number two! If you come there will be a even bigger chance of success! Resulting in a bigger chance of your family getting back to normal! (someone shouts, "and getting home-cooked food again!", followed by mmms and sighs) Number three! (Pauses and looks at the same paper from earlier) Oh ya! Number three! On the drive to one of these places you will get the once in a life time chance of seeing the world! (oohs and ahhs from off-screen) And you have to admit driving a car sounds fun! But make sure you are safe! No injuries! Anyways I hope you decide to come. We will give you two and a half weeks to arrive! Good luck! (Signals the camera boy to stop it.)

SEBASTIAN

Whew! That was exhausting! But fun too! I should probably let Kit and Gus know how it went! (Turns on walkie talkie) Hey guys! We did it.

Hi Spearmint and MapleWay,

Mailice here with a short review!

Glad to get back here as it feels like one can eat one's favourite candy again.

Now I could insert a lot of sentences here that I liked because of the humour, but I think that would just be too many and wouldn't really help. Sebastian as TV presenter did a really great job and I really like how you managed to present a very funny act again with a combination of the conversation and the text in brackets, so I'll just limit myself here to these three points that caught my eye:

Anyways my name is Sebastian White and just like all of you. My family has gone a littl- No

So please don't crash your cars!

RANDOM KID

Check out the other acts too, if you haven't already! ^-^
(A Totally Not Evil) Bakesale, Act 1
(A Totally Not Evil) Bakesale, Act 2
(A Totally Not Evil) Bakesale, Act 3
(A Totally Not Evil) Bakesale, Act 4
(A Totally Not Evil) Bakesale, Act 5
(A Totally Not Evil) Bakesale, Act 6
(This is Act 7!)