Hold Steady

Hey! IamTraunt, your Marvel buddy here.

Am I creeping you out? Because, yes, I am reviewing your works. Mwhahahahaha. Ahem.

Okay, like Royal said, I can't pick a certain meaning. Whenever I read over this poem, I find myself asking: Could this also mean this? Could that actually mean that? What if this also means...? It's like a puzzle that can be fitted in place to make various different pictures. It has a new aura, a new breath of air and life each time. It is very unique, Vanishing Blue, to say the least. What was your inspiration may I ask?
HOW COULD IT NOT HAVE A SINGLE LIKE ON IT? WHAT WERE PEOPLE THINKING!? IT'S A WORK OF ART! A MASTER PIECE.
Ahem. Sorry for the shouting.
I like the devices you have used, such as enjambment, the rhyme scheme is not forced, and it flows lovely. Every word in this piece is powerful. Every word has an important meaning.
Well done, my blue friend, well done indeed.
Keep it up!

RoyalHighness has arrived to review!

Goodness gracious, this was really great.
Way to keep up with the enjambment until the very end. Way to keep the capitalization constant.
I don't mind those artistic liberalities, but if they're not consistent, I get upset. So good job!

I like the form you have here. It's unique, it's making me think about how it ties back to the concept.

The reason I know this is a good poem is because I don't fully understand what it's about. Every time I read and re-read this, I can find a new meaning in this word or this line or wow I didn't think of that before. I like that feeling, and I know it's difficult to put in a poem.

I LOVE THE LAST COUPLET. I LOVE IT A LOT. I WANT TO TAKE IT HOME WITH ME AND CUDDLE WITH IT.

Overall, I seriously liked this poem. I liked it a lot. I like it present tense. I'll probably like it in five years.

I have nothing more to say, really. That's about it.
This was one of my shortest reviews!
So to wrap it up, I honor you with nine of ten stars! Fabulous job, darling!

Hey hey! It's Neverland here to review your piece.

I'd like to start off by saying that you need to fix up the grammar just a little. Capital letters and punctuation, you know what I mean? And I as a lover of poetry prefer people not using brackets. I find it ... annoying I guess.

But I love the concept. The way you had it about the two people and it was about both of them, what was happening to them. Most people don't do that. It's original.

I have to say the last stanza is probably my favourite. I'm to sure why, I just really like it. It's also a nice way to end it.


I loved this piece overall even though there are a few bugs you could fix. (Is bugs even the right word to use?)

Good luck with writing and I look forward to seeing more of your work in the GreenRoom.
~Neverland.