Try writing about missing writing. It might help.
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Hello and good day, Shadow Vyper!
Your poem has a good message that I think most of us can relate to.
The funny thing is I've actually written a poem with a similar message very recently, and the other day, I found another one by another YWS user!
I love how you put the words into a background, that is something I'm going to have to try soon. You also used all lowercase letters to convey a sense of loneliness and doom, didn't you? The poem doesn't rhyme, but it flows smoothly and should roll off the tongue (if I spoke it, but I'm in a room full of people! Although I'm sure they would appreciate your poem!)
An idea has been floating around my mind recently, and I thought I'd put it out there, what if we compiled a book of (100 or so) YWS poems (with the poets' permission of course) and published it?!
Anyway, love the poem, love the message, keep it up, Poet!
Truly, Miecz
Hi! This is a really cool poem, and the message is very relatable. I love the sustained fire imagery throughout, and I think the idea of being "prescribed a burn" is a really interesting way of mixing a sort of sterile, medical imagery with the natural imagery of fire.
I did have a few notes on the flow of some of the lines, starting with the line,
to maintain the internal health of my soul.
the glow within me now dreary and cold.
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