Young Writers Society

Hey, MapleWay, sorry this is late, but I just came across this piece of writing!

This was such a great poem! I really liked how it was so thrilling. The reader could feel like they were actually following the man. You built up so much suspense and added a cliff-hanger at the end, which I really enjoyed. It left me on edge!

My absolute favorite lines were "And making it seem/like a grand concert/Where the man/has a great role to play!" That was an excellent analogy and put an image in my head on what this person was like.

Overall great job, keep up the great work

Signed,
Pineapple

When poems tell a story, it is so enchanting and this piece is a perfect example of this. I love the feeling that we are practically following this figure, one with a lantern and letter in hand. Careful word choice and variation within each line make for a satisfying read. Meanwhile, the first person narrator and descriptions of his or her experiences bring us from wherever we are and into the world that is created within this work. Personally, I like to see separation between stanzas but in poetry, punctuation and spacing really depends on what the author is trying to convey. I believe a very strong sequel could be written to this poem as well. It simply has such a feeling of peace and relaxation.

Hello! Book_Dragon here for a really quick review.

First of all, this is a very nice poem. I love the suspense and how the reader is left with unanswered questions! My favorite bit is definitely:

A box of gold
Holding a candle of light.
It flickers
It flutters
It duels the night sky.

It just sounds so beautiful and kind of haunting as well, I think. Wow, I just really like that part. I can't think of any critiques at the moment, so good job both of you!

Keep writing,
-Book_Dragon

Hello Boo’s
It’s Berry!

I loved the descriptive words in this and how it flowed so smoothly. The suspense of if the main character in this poem is going to be killed or not is a main point that brought this whole poem together! I loved the description of the lantern and how it flickers aswell. Good job you guys!