Hello, Buzz here to review!
I liked how you expressed singing here, it was an interesting perspective which i haven't seen before. It was well written generally and it was simple, which is good. There is always room for improvement though.
I felt like this dragged a bit after a few stanzas to get to the actual point where you sing. Every stanza should hold just as much emotion as the previous ones that followed. I would have also liked to have seen some musical singing terms used, they would have worked well with your poem.
"My heart is pounding.
It's been so long
Since I lifted my voice in front of a crowd
Since I knew no one would ask for quiet
Since I knew I was free to pray."
A good opening but, line four feels like the sentence is incomplete or seems slightly off, maybe its the word choice.
"I grasp that warmth, that flaming emotion.
I know I have to project it now, before my chance is gone
To share the beauty and hurt and joy and love
That are tangled within me
Like brightly colored threads pulled tight,
A tightness in my chest that threatens tears,
Tears I don't understand.
Are they joy or are they sorrow?"
This was my favorite stanza, you captured the mixed emotions that go with singing and the preparation for it.
-Buzz
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