Hold the Wind

There is quite a few creative lines here. Like 'Nightmares are dashed upon the rocks,' Of all those bird-hearted spirits,' and 'Storm-tossed souls such as I.' I wondered about how you could double space your lines, because it didn't work when I did it and I edited it like two times!
Keep up the good work. I don't have anything to criticize about except I think I saw some punctuation that shouldn't be there.

Wow, great poem!

I like how you ask a question to the reader at the beginning. By directing the question directly to the reader (Can YOU hold the wind?) it immediately feels personal. Then I like how you open the question to further investigation by asking "WHO can hold the wind?" By broadening the question, the reader can rack their brain for the answer. You don't leave the question unanswered though, which brings closure to the poem. Your answer is powerful and strong (I can hold the wind) and challenges the reader. It leaves the reader inspired to grab a hold of their own destiny.

I also liked how you also show your weaker side near the beginning of the poem, which humanizes you and gives the poem an air of humility, causing the reader to relate to you more.
You're the storm tossed soul that rides the wind, but you also hold the wind.

You also don't just announce that it is you that holds the wind, but you build up to it.
The third stanza of the poems looks inward and grows into a "lamenting tempest." It almost feels like the development of a storm. The two lines before the last, calm the storm.

This poem riles the reader up, and when it is done, it leaves the reader touched.

HI! i loved it, i loved the concept of the wind representing hope and emotion. I particularly like the fact that even though it's a a very serene poem the use of the word wind is powerful and strong.

Overall i think it was great but i was a little confusing at times, it could of been made more undemanding and simple.

this is my first time on YWS so sorry if it's a bad review!:P

-charl9tte99

Hi Liaya,here I am to make my review on your poem!

First of all,I like the concept here when you use the wind to represent power,dream and hope from the first stanza until the second stanza.But excessive use of diction has affected the real meaning of the poem that eventually led to confusion for the reader.

#Which power is the free emotions

Of all those bird-hearted spirits

That long to soar up to the sky--

It much more better when you just use a simple words to point up the themes here.
Anyway,I enjoyed reading your poem here as there is some lines making me amazed and forced me to think of the real meaning is.Good job and keep writing in YWS
Thank you,cheer.
~NightWalker.

Hi there. Ariana with your review. This is a very beautiful poem. There wrere parts of it that were a bit confusing, but overall, this was beautiful. I was really intrigued by the whole concept of "holding the wind". While reading this, I began to visualize your words. Your lines such as "then soars a free bird ovrr the ocean"were so serene. This was a very refreshing read. Thanks for sharing.

That was a nice poem. I liked it. But some of it I didn't understand. Like the second stanza. This part made it especially confusing:

"Which power is the free emotions"


There's a grammar error in here, but I'm not sure what it is because I don't know if it's what you meant or not.

Overall, I liked the poem. Keep writing!