Under my violet sky
when summer's worked
it's magic -- I'll be here
in Wanton fields, running
like a child in mid-December
from the Chills of night --
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And by morning light
nothing will hurt,
it will have washed
away the demons --
left them lying on the shores
of a distant memory.
(to be found by the stars)
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And by moonlight
I'll gaze at the stars
like a child in awe of
Magic -- under my violet
sky speckled in light --
I'll be here in summer's
night to smack the stones
of my mind across the
ocean -- and watch as
they skip to you.
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You have great descriptions.
My favorite is:
Keep writing!
~Ladypurple.
Haha, thank you, guys.
The flow -- I know, I should tweak it a bit. Haha
I have nothing negative to say of this poem. It was very imaginative indeed. The descriptions were fantastic and the use of capital letters to emphasize words was subtle and effective. I loved the imagery and metaphors. Like I said: nothing bad, excellent!
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I like this its very creative.
I liked the poem a lot. It had a lot of imagery and a lot of meaning. However in opinion I don't think it flowed well enough. You are on the right track just keep perfecting one thing, because my first poem took months to perfect and now my friends love it!
Good Work! message me with any questions I would love to help!!!
Good Luck!
XOXO
Colie18