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Like, so here's how it goes. First of all, I wrote these all as separate sections, but the caterpillar one came in the middle. I put it at the beginning because otherwise the title of the whole series wouldn't make sense. Now, though, with your wise advice, I have a REASON.
<3 LOVE FOR EVER. <3
I will stick something like that in here. Oh wow, do I love you more than anything. :C
For sure I wouldn't want to hog you all to myself. >_> -shifty eyes-
=D I will hopefully get some time to critique again and get to some more of YOUR work too! Let me know if YOU ever need anything, Evi dear~ <3 We shall be good critiquing buddies!! ^_^ <3
-rushes off to finish editing this section and the first to get GOLDEN STARS~-
-Hannah-
Oh, goody! I'm here to finish what I started!
Dude. I died when I read this. Positively died. This. Is. So. Hilarious.
Question mark at the end of this, I believe.
This is a rather long sentence. Any way for you to chop it in half?
I like this as an ending...however (there's that word again) I got an idea. To tie up the whole caterpillar thing (which we never found out about, might I remind you) you could mention a butterfly! That would be epically awesome. Her whole transformation from no self-confidence (caterpillar) to comtemplating love (butterly). That would be very, vey cool, I belive. Just consider it.
So. I think you're extremely talentled. I'd like toi read some non-Charlotte stuff just to see if that tone of voice you use is purely for this character, or if it's your style of writing as a whole. So, expect to see me around critiqqing some more of your stuff! Maybe not imediately, though, if you know what I mean.
PM for anything at all, even if you want me to look over an edit. I will gladly! I really loved this, and I shall go back and give a gold star to every single installment if you edit! *waves gold stars in front of Hannah's face, then snatches them away*
Congrats, good luck, and see you around!
~Evi