This is very good!
I especially love the first stanza because the way you describe it creates perfect images inside my head and you descriptions are extremely good as well.
Another thing that I must say I love about your poem is that it's very original, and being original is a very good thing to be!
I must say though that some of your lines were rather long so maybe you could think about breaking some of them up into couplets or something like that. Just a suggestion.
I like the length of your poem as well. It's not to short but it's not annoyingly long either so that makes me feel happy on the inside
Overall I think that this poem was extremely well written, I love your writing style, your descriptions and the images you manage to create in my head!
Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read some more of your wonderful poems.
Keep writing x
Meg x-x
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