A Fight for Survival ~ Darkness Approaches Prologue

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world)

Let's see if I can finish this off today.

First Impression: Pretty neat prologue there. Does the introductory stuff pretty well. All in all great job on that.

Anyway onto the nitpicks and bad jokes,

Viper could feel himself tremble in fright as he stood in front of the large gates. Their long shadow casting over him, like a beast awaiting its prey. Sucking in a large breath Viper began to step away, not ready for the next big step he is forced to make. He jumped when he felt a large wing on his back. It’s warmth like a shield against the dark shadow of the gates.

Slowly, Viper began to walk in, knowing after this, his life would no longer be the same. His eyes darted from one place to the next. How could this be happening? Why would he be taken to such a place like this?

When they walked through the gap in the large mountain, the wooden doors closed behind them. Locking them in from the outside world. Roars filled his ears. He could also hear the sound of weapons clashing together. Dragons in all shapes and sizes filled the courtyard.

Not even looking down at Viper the other dragon said, “We’re going to meet the chief.” He slowly began to pick up the pace.

“Really?” Viper asked in wonder. Meeting the chief was a great honor, normally he wouldn’t have time for a simple villager like himself.

Looking to the back of the room before the throne was a desk carved out of stone, and on it lay a large map of Lavvania.

Viper cringed when his gaze was met with another, it’s dark eyes held the pain of many wars and the loss of many.

“This is your new home, Viper.” The much older dragon spoke. “I will be your teacher for the first few weeks, we will train in this very spot every day until you are fully trained. Then you will be named a true soldier and one day you will get to the standards of a warrior.”

Viper gasped, was this happening? He was going to train with the chief, the most skilled dragon in Endless Dunes.

“My name is Venom.” Venom introduced, smiling a little, his white teeth sparkling in the dancing firelight. “There is hope for you here at the fort. So train hard and prove your worth.” He leaned down and touched Viper’s nose with his own. After a few moments, he leaned away. “We will start training in the morning.”

Overcome with joy Viper raced down the ruff steps almost tripping over his own feet and tail. Never in his life did he think this would ever happen to him. He had a chance to train as hard as he could, and one day he may be the best warrior in all of Lavvania.

Hello IcyFirePheonix! (Yes, if you are okay with it, that is what I am going to call you, ) I hope you are having a great Review Day! Reviewing this has been on my to-read for awhile now, but I haven't gotten around to it until now! Soooo yay!
I really like your set up with this, and I already have several different predications, which, if you've seen some of my reviews on other novels, I can go on looooonngg rants about, but I don't think I know enough yet to really flesh out any ideas.
I can't wait to read the next chapter!
One thing I noticed, though,
"Viper followed the older dragon as he walked up a flight of stairs that had been carved out of the rock. It didn’t take them long to reach the top. That led to the very top of the mountain."

I was a little confused when reading this line, it might work better something like this,
"Viper followed the older dragon up a flight of stairs that led to the very top of the mountain, it didn't take them long to reach the top."

Of course, it's up to you, and that's just a suggestion.

Other than that, I really liked this, I think I'll get to the next chapter sometime tomorrow!
Happy review day!

Wow! I sincerely regret taking such a long time to read this. It's fantastic!!! I love how u describe viper's affection for the sand. It gives us a glimpse of the - I'd even say romance - between this sand wyvern and sand itself. Which makes a lot of sense
The description was phenomenal. As u already know, better than most, I struggle with description and can't help but admire the great work u did here. Keep it up!!!
-Sheildmaiden

Wow! I sincerely regret taking such a long time to read this. It's fantastic!!! I love how u describe viper's affection for the sand. It gives us a glimpse of the - I'd even say romance - between this sand wyvern and sand itself. Which makes a lot of sense
The description was phenomenal. As u already know, better than most, I struggle with description and can't help but admire the great work u did here. Keep it up!!!
-Sheildmaiden

Ah, finally I have time to review something and I was waiting for something draconic from you! I'll be glad to leave my review now. So let's begin.

Viper could feel himself tremble in fright as he stood in front of the large gates. Their long shadow casting over him, like a beast awaiting its prey. Sucking in a large breath Viper began to step away, not ready for the next big step he is forced to make. He jumped when he felt a large wing on his back. It’s warmth like a shield against the dark shadow of the gates.

He looked up and his gaze was met with another’s warm eyes. The love that could be seen through their gaze seemed to calm him down. The wing of the other dragon never left his back as they slowly walked towards his new home.

Stopping Viper watched the large wooden gates slowly open. The heavy doors kicked up sun-kissed sand as they moved. They gave a loud creak when they finally stopped.

Slowly, Viper began to walk in, knowing after this, his life would no longer be the same. His eyes darted from one place to the next. How could this be happening? Why would he be taken to such a place like this?

“Everything’s going to be okay.” A soft choice spoke to him.

Viper looked up at the much larger dragon, their scales sparkling in the sun’s rays of light, and nodded. Was everything going to be okay, how could they be so sure?

When they walked through the gap in the large mountain, the wooden doors closed behind them. Locking them in from the outside world. Roars filled his ears. He could also hear the sound of weapons clashing together. Dragons in all shapes and sizes filled the courtyard.

Viper gasped with wonder, all fear gone as he looked at his surroundings. He turned his head around so he could look behind him.

The wooden gates were attached to a wall of rock that went around and joined up with the mountain that was quit away, away from where he was standing. It looked like the wall of rock was once part of the mountain but now there was enough space for hundreds of dragons to stand between it and the mountain before him.

The older dragon next to him lifted his wing from his back and began to walk towards a gaping hole in the mountain. Flicking his tail as he went through the training dragons. Getting out of his trance Viper raced after him, kicking up sand as he went.

When he entered the mountain he made sure to stay close to the older dragon, afraid he would be lost if he wondered. “Where are we going?” He asked as he looked at the burning torches that traveled along the walls, lighting the hall they were walking down.

Not even looking down at Viper the other dragon said, “We’re going to meet the chief.” He slowly began to pick up the pace.

“Really?” Viper asked in wonder. Meeting the chief was a great honor, normally he wouldn’t have time for a simple villager like himself.

Simply nodding his head the dragon leading Viper turned a right, then a left. Viper had to run to catch up with the older dragon. His talons felt strange as they clicked against the hard stone floor. He was used to walking on the welcoming sand. But this was only for a little while.

To Viper it seemed like hours had passed when they finally reached the throne room. The torches that were attached to the walls burned bright with a wavy fire that cast the room in its warm glow. Looking to the back of the room before the throne was a desk carved out of stone, and on it lay a large map of Lavvania.

Moving his eyes further back, Viper saw five thrones. The two thrones to the right and left were smaller than the one in the center. Viper cringed when his gaze was met with another, it’s dark eyes held the pain of many wars and the loss of many.

The dark figure stood and slowly moved towards Viper. The firelight dancing along his scales. Making him look like he was on fire. He was a lot larger than any other Sand Wyvern. His long scorpion-like tail slid along the floor not making a sound.

“Is this him?” He hissed in a low voice. His eyes looking Viper up and down. “His rather small.”

The other dragon next the Viper nodded. “Yes, this is him, my Lord.” He bowed his head, his wings fanned out, and his right talon tucked under him.

“Very well.” He turned around and flicked his tail as he walked.

Viper turned to face the dragon that had taken him to this place, he only nodded. With his snout, he pushed Viper forward. Making him follow their chief.

Grinning Viper ran after the chief who was going down another tunnel that was on the other side of the room. This hall was also lit by glowing fires. It was a lot narrower than the last. But Viper didn’t mind.

A cold silence hung over the two as they walked. Not a single word was spoken. Viper looked up at the older dragon now he was walking next to him. His eyes were grim and he didn’t have any emotion. What had happened to him to make him like this?

“Do you know why you are here, Viper?” He asked, looking down at Viper, his dark orbs so dark it was like he was forcing Viper to look into them.

Acting quickly Viper shook his head. “N…no.” He wanted to look away, but the dark eyes on him wouldn’t allow such a move.

Viper followed the older dragon as he walked up a flight of stairs that had been carved out of the rock. It didn’t take them long to reach the top. That led to the very top of the mountain.

Viper lifted a wing to shield his eyes from the blinding sun, it’s warmth chasing away the cold of the caves. But what he saw was not what he expected at all. It was an arena that had been carved out of the mountain. Walls of rock encircled the large piece of ground like walls.

Viper walked out into the arena, a trance taking over him when he felt a soft beady feeling under his feet. He looked down to see it was the softness of the sand he loved so much.

“This is your new home, Viper.” The much older dragon spoke. “I will be your teacher for the first few weeks, we will train in this very spot every day until you are fully trained. Then you will be named a true soldier and one day you will get to the standards of a warrior.”

Viper gasped, was this happening? He was going to train with the chief, the most skilled dragon in Endless Dunes.

“My name is Venom.” Venom introduced, smiling a little, his white teeth sparkling in the dancing firelight. “There is hope for you here at the fort. So train hard and prove your worth.” He leaned down and touched Viper’s nose with his own. After a few moments, he leaned away. “We will start training in the morning.”

Overcome with joy Viper raced down the ruff steps almost tripping over his own feet and tail. Never in his life did he think this would ever happen to him. He had a chance to train as hard as he could, and one day he may be the best warrior in all of Lavvania.

Hi Flames!

Hope you're doing well today or tonight, depending on what side of the world you're on, obviously. I'm here to give you a review! Let's hop right into it now, shall we? Alright. Starting from here:

Stopping Viper watched the large wooden gates slowly open. The heavy doors kicked up sun-kissed sand as they moved.

The wooden gates were attached to a wall of rock that went around and joined up with the mountain that was quit away, away from where he was standing.

When he entered the mountain he made sure to stay close to the older dragon, afraid he would be lost if he wondered.

“His rather small.”

“My name is Venom.”

Overcome with joy Viper raced down the ruff steps almost tripping over his own feet and tail.

Hi @FlamingPhoenix I am here to do a review for you, seeing that this is not out the green room yet and it has got some really good stuff in here.
I heard that you started your book again.
So I have heard that you changed the name for your first book, and I think the change is great, I feel like the name suits it quit well.
also I could not hold this in I no it like gets mentioned at like the end of the chapter but well what ever.

He had a chance to train as hard as he could, and one day he may be the best warrior in all of Lavvania.