I'll just sit and wait for tomorrow
if that's alright with you
Even if it's not, it will have to be
'cause there's nothing else I can do
I'm feeling a tad peculiar
but no one comprehends
It happened all so long ago
since I went round the bend
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Very very sad baby. It is really upsetting. I hope this person has a helping hand.
The whole work is very down, not necessarily depressing, but just downbeat. That is not a criticism but I just really hope the narrator finds someone they relate to.
If you read the poem, you get this overbearing sense of giving up and turning in on one's self. I think it's very sad and this person needs to be loved. They deserve it. I just know they do.
Hii'
Quite a baffling poem,you know.I just liked the way,you were so straightfoward at throwing your emotions around in the lines,as if you were throwing "tantrums too sane,in grace." -Hahah..
Truly,thats what I felt.
And you wont believe me,but I was left gasping,thinking why on Earth ,would you be so cruel ,so as to end this poem so short? I was actually left wanting for more of this "Mystery Stuff"
You were awesome at it,Really.
Keep writing!
You seem to be speaking of emotions lost. But your confused as to when or if this happened? Then ou continue saying that you wont enjoy your suitors company, and he will have wait indeffinately. And the bend is the indefinable moment when this peculiar mood set in. All is said well in this short poem. It does the job. Good grammer and good work.
Hey!
So I really liked how this poem is mysterious, and yet you knew that something bad was going to happen. I was confused on the bend too - until I looked and you had explained it to hollyhuez.. so then I kind of figured out the poem. But over all, I really liked this piece, and think that you should continue writing..
Hey.
I really, really liked this because it touched my heart in a way that I'd cry if I explained it. I felt a lot for this poem.
I have a few nitpicks that, if I may, suggest.
-I was audibly confused towards the end of the poem. What is this 'bend' and what happened 'so long ago'? Possibly support some of these stanzas with some more details?
-I'm not sure if there is supposed to be any punctuation since this is a poem, but if there is there's none
anyways, I liked this piece. keep on writing
the "bend" is a colloquial way of saying "going mad"
Glad you liked it. XD
There isn't supposed to be punctuation, it's like unpunctuated thoughts.