Misplaced

This poem has a lot of bite to it, a lot of sass, a lot of pessimism, and a lot of hyperbole. This can be a strength, but at times it comes across as unnecessarily dark. I mean, the words displayed are already very striking. Does it need the attitude? It seems like the speaker in bold- presumably a psychiatrist or a counsellor- is trying to help, or you could be being cynical and poking sarcastic fingers at them.

I did like the call and response aspect of the poem. It's the relationship between the two characters which makes this poem unique. The responder is also very clever, too, and is incredibly honest. Honesty is a quality which I personally revere, so I like this aspect of your poem. Again, I like the formatting of this poem, showing the contrast between the helper and the responder. It's almost an internal monologue, as if the speaker(s) is looking for a reason to live within their own mind.

Now, as I mentioned previously, I am not such a fan of how bitter and angry and just downright arrogant the responder is. The bold speaker is trying to help them, at least I'd like to think so, but they keep on piling on the misery complexes. Also, those lines about rather dying and being done with life appear very dramatic and I don't take it seriously. Sure, the speaker has parents who have split up and are depressed, but that doesn't give them carte blanche to be totally unhelpful to them. It creates a victim complex and a superiority complex at the same time.

I get the impression that I am supposed to have sympathy for the depressed speaker. However, I don't, because they're written to be horrible and dismissive.

Hi. I came across this poem not too long ago and came to write my opinion and a few suggestions for the poem.

Overall, the poem holds a very deep meaning, especially with the issue of depression and self hatred. The way you covered this serious topic was interesting because of how straightforward it is and of course you can't argue that the layout of it is different from what we normally see, even using italics and bold can actually show the two different personalities.

However, I feel as if the poem requires an answer. Why is the character depressed? Who is the person asking the character these questions?

Speaking of the person who asks questions , I think you should make him/her have more emotion because the way he/she asked things seemed like a robot but if that's your angle then good job.

I hope this helps you improve and don't forget to never stop writing

Hi,
I agreed with Choco that you did a good job putting emotions into words!
This piece is interesting!

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The questions and the answers. Yeah, this poem indicated that not every question could be answered easily. The questions are interesting. Like a person asking questions and then getting some rude answers and then slowly gave up in the end. I think you've made me laughed...

Of course, never mind that.

Both of the speakers in the poem shows themselves a slightly big contraction between them and good job int that. The thing I rather like is the raw of the italicized words. I feel them so honest and direct and great! This rawness shows us something else. Greater than what you think although you're the poet of this poem. It will likely give us the real persona of a person. And the persona is almost close to a real person. I know you might be puzzled by this, but the thing I would like to stress in this is you're greater than you think.

Anyway, when I thoroughly read this again, I found out a fact...a big one and that is this...

Do you want to talk?

Hey there, gonna leave you a review!

So, firstly, I love the way you set this poem up. I think it added to the theme with the question and answer set up you have going on. I'd also like to say, you did a fairly good job setting this up in such a way that it doesn't feel over-used. Most poetry covering depression, etc., tends to be repetitive and cliché. But I didn't find this issue with your peice. Normally when I'm reading poetry covering such an emotion, I'd want more imagery and metaphors/similes, etc., but with your peice, I don't find this necessary. I don't find anything worth nit picking about, and actually quite enjoyed this poem! Great job, and I'll be sure to check out some of your other works!

Hey! Cello here!

You did an amazing job putting emotion into words. It's a bit of sass, a bit of sadness, and it all ties together perfectly. I like the formatting too. It adds a lot to the 'conversation'.

Why have you been having these nightmares?