Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
142,057 Literary Works • 676,501 Reviews
I enjoyed this poem greatly. I, for one, love horses, so I may be just a little bit biased, but I thought it was an excellent poem. I, like MorningStar, also find it interesting that you incorporated all four elements into the poem. Just a couple things that I saw that needed fixing in this poem: Capitalize each first letter of each line, punctuate, and capitalize words like "I". Other than that... fantastic!
I like this poem a lot. I really enjoy how you incorporated all four elements into it. The transitions into the different elements are so swift that there's no need to read something over in confusion and the phrases in which you bring forth each new element are all perfect. A+ on your transitions.
I would only say that this work as a whole might have gone a little more smoothly had you put in an extended metaphor or used more artistic speech. Your work makes me want to feel the wind in m hair and the water on my skin, and it's so, so close to doing that, but just not quite.
Also, it may be more accurate to say "sandstorm incarnate", since a horse cannot personify anything.