the rapture of your stare
the gleaming of the night
the wandering of the moon
the blissfulness of light.
the delights of your words
the sparkling of your lies
the departing of the sun
the hate behind our eyes.
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This is fucking amazing!!!! My baby is all grown up
The title caught my eye and i'm really happy it did! the poem was elegantly short, the words you used were beautifully placed and thought of, it's rhythm was perfect.
This made me curious about their story, its a piece that stuck with me even after I finished the poem, I want to know more!
All in all, this was nicely crafted piece. Its a nice balance between darkness and beauty.
Its mystery.
amazing job!
Thank you so much. I'm so happy to see that you like my poetry. When I was writing it, I was actually thinking of falling in love with the complexity and darkness of the Devil. Glad you enjoyed it!
Heyy, Charlotte!!
Here I am with a review for your sweet work!
So, let us start the review with the comments on the title. The title was very attactive and catchy.
It was a short and sweet poem. It took me to a fatasy world. I enjoyed this piece. I like how you have described each and every thing in the poem. The adjectives which you used were very apt and they suited the things and the verbs.
Rapture of the stare, blissful light, departing sun... everything written beautifully. It basically seemed like the adjectives and the things which they are describing, clubbed together with an amazing art and molded into a beautiful poem.
Overall, a GREAT work!
SUPERB!!
Keep writing!
For anyone reading this, I know technically I should be using capital letters and punctuation all the way through, but it's just my preferred style to do it like this.