love is what springs from the mountain rush,
love is the beauty, the flowery blush.
love is the coolness of the rainstorm's dew,
love is the colour, the sky's bright blue.
love is what grows from the freshened ground,
love is the singing, the sweet bird's sound.
love is not lurking, love is not lust,
love is everything, love is love dust.
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Here I am again, Chilow for a review, here we go
I'm sure that you picked up on my love of simple poetry from my last review, so I'll try to keep that to a minimum this time xD
I've said this about other poems, and I'll never tire of saying it- There are not enough poems on the topic of love. There simply never will be. Poets seem to be afraid of writing poems on the topic nowadays for fear of being shot down by reviewers for being "unoriginal" or "bland." To those reviewers, I say go read poetry somewhere else. Love is a bottomless fount of inspiration, and a poet who may tap that flowing stream has my unending respect. What you've written here has a classic beauty, one of simple, well, love, and I can only commend you for being able to use so few words to let readers such as myself in on the extraordinary nature of poetry. I thank you for that
Anyways, keep up the fantastic work, and I think I have a few more reviews left in me, so expect to see me in a few other of your works in the near future! Cheers
Hi @Charlotte2, I have just seen and reviewed your poem 'I Am Death' and that got you my follow. I then proceeded to look through your other poems to see what other work you had done and it was well worth while. I really liked this poem. The way you describe things is amazing. My personal favorite part of this poem was the last two lines. Keep up the excellent work!
Hi Charlotte2, Felistia here with a review for you on this wonderful day.
I think it would sound better if you wrote it like thisTitle: The title is intently interesting and instantly drew my interest. The title also had a connection to the poem, the last line in the poem. Because the title is the last line in the poem it makes the last line of the poem seem more meaningful. I'd say that this is a perfect title.
Description: The description that you had in this poem really made it a beautiful poem. It created some wonderful pictures in my mind and made the poem wonderful to read.
Rhythm: The rhythm of poem was wonderful. It had a steady rhythmic flow that made the poem feel like warm summer sunshine. There was only one little thing that bothered me
Grammar and Punctuation: I couldn't really find any grammar problems. The only thing I had a problem with was that there were no capitals. I think you should have a capital at the beginning of each line.
Overall this was a great poem and I look forward to the next one. Never stop writing and I hope you have a great day\night.
Your friend, Felistia.
Hi
here to leave you a review... again! (i really love your poetry, they are so easy and pretty!This is by far your best one!)
I can't really find anything to comment on to improve, however the only thing I can say is the syllables don't really match in the lines. They are 9 10 10 9 9 9 9 9 maybe you can tweak them to get a better rhythm.
Apart from that nothing is catching my eye that needs to be improved on so I am going to tell you about the wonderful imagery you used and the perfect use of punctuation that you have showed in this poem.
The positive beauty-nature themed diction along with the use of alliteration convey brilliant visual and auditory imagery that really made me get involved in the poem and I felt every single word in my heart.
Another awesome thing I noticed is the way you used end-stopped lines after every rhyming couplet. It gives a perfect structure to the poem as after the end-stopped line you move on to tackle another image which is great. Also the use of rhyme is so beautiful and freely written which continues to contribute to the whole image of love.
Wonderful work!
~RS
Hi there Charlotte!!
I saw the title and I just got attracted!! So, here is a review for you!
The title as I mentioned already in the beginning, is attractive. The theme is very beautiful. I liked the theme.
I like how you have explained the meaning of love here. I could feel the feels. I appreciate you for the rhyming scheme. It is really hard to include a rhyming scheme, 'aa bb cc', without disturbing the meaning of the sentences.
You have compared love's beauty with the beauty of nature created by the almighty God. Beautiful idea. Deserves praise.
I loved this piece. AWESOMEly written.
The poem has a whole lot of deep meaning. I drowned in the depth of the meaning.
It was an AMAZING poem.
BEAUTIFUL!
Keep writing...
Never cease!
Have a great day/night/evening!