hi
Ummm your poem is rad !
I loved the flow, and the fact that the imagery was so clear and everything was explained so well.
But since it's a spiritual one, I think you could've added why and how you believe so much in your God, like when you said "the god I'll go to soon."
You can expand your poem a bit, because night has a lot many other beautiful things you could've mentioned, all which make the night more beautiful.
But careful not to be very repetitive.
You can add like how there's no other beautiful place but only this, and how this beautiful night really makes you appreciate God. The creator of all beautiful things.
All I wish is that you expand it a little bit more, cus it's an amazing piece.
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