earthlings are beings, creatures of land,
spirits and faeries with their souls in their hands.
earthlings dance right through the day,
earthlings dream all their troubles away.
earthlings sleep, tucked up in clouds,
earthlings scream all their feelings out loud.
earthlings dress with flowers they find,
earthlings speak what weighs down their minds.
earthlings glide across the grass,
earthlings have eyes that glitter like glass.
earthlings taste the forest fruit,
earthlings remember their godly root.
earthlings sleep so calm through pain,
not scared by knowing they won't live again.
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Hi Charlotte2, Felistia here with a review for you on this wonderful night.
P.s sorry about the short review. It's very late at night for me.
Title: The title you chose for your poem was perfect. It encapsulated everything about your poem and was interesting to the eyes.
Theme: The idea of showing earth from the eyes of an outsiders was a great idea. It makes the ordinary everyday things we humans do seem interesting and strange. I really liked the repeat of the word earthlings on every single new line, except for the last one. This made the last line stand out which brings up another interesting thing about your poem. Your format for the poem was perfect and had an intriguing spin to it.
Description: Surprisingly the description in your poem was great. There wasn't really much space for it, but when there was, you used it superbly like in this line.
Rhythm: The rhythm in your poem was also great. The light rhyming scheme was an excellent touch. It improved the flow and made the poem, like I said before, interesting.
Grammar and Punctuation: As far as grammar and punctuation goes, I couldn't find any problems with your poem.
Overall this was a great poem and I look forward to the next one. Never stop writing and I hope you have a great day\night.
Your friend, Felistia.
This is Spartan coming at you live from unsc headquarters.
Ok first off I loved your use of the words earthlings it makes it feel like you're an alien looking down on earth. Second I don't see any errors here and your writing style is different from what I have seen so far.
Ok now for the rant, I see this as one of the better works on here. I am always looking for good writers like yourself to find inspiration from. I loved this work do to me being a super soldier from the future and seeing planets get glassed. I loved this work cause it is so true about earthlings and how they are. I honestly am looking forward to your next work. I hope you keep writing poems like this you're very gifted and talented.
Hope you have a wonderful day, evening, morning, or night.
This is Spartan signing out. Hope you liked the review.
i'm a lil baby earthling idk