The Last Hope a Rose

This poem is beautifully written.
The structure is fantastic, and I love that there are a number of lines that rhyme.
Some of the imagery used is very striking, such as:

"Stretching out of the rubble of my broken heart"

and

"Wanting to prove there can be life in the shadows"

The sense of hope and the chance of life created at the start of the piece is lovely. It mirrors hiw society had the chance to bloom into something beautiful.

"It struggles for life"

This line also echoes society, and how people try to make it work but the structure is already collapsing, the rose beginning to die.

"Is lost"

These two words to round off the poem are very effective, and somewhat haunting. It's liek a foreshadowing of what will happen to society without any support.

Overall, I found this poem both truthful and beautiful. It was very enjoyable to read, and the metaphorical use of the rose as society was very effective. I have no suggestions for improvement. Just keep up the great work!

Wow! I really like the concept of this poem, I'm so happy that you thought of it. I also like the formatting, which actually reminds me of a poem itself.
Just a couple things: One, did you mean for the title to be "The Last Hope a Rose" or did you want it to be "The Last Hope, A Rose" or "The Last Hope of a Rose"? It doesn't make much sense the way it is now, so I wanted to double check.
Though a lot of the imagery here is good, a lot of the phrasing makes it hard to understand. I usually advise people to be loose about punctuation in their poems, but I think that using punctuation would actually help improve this one. I think the transitions would be a lot clearer if you did add a couple periods and commas.
Lastly, I feel like the transition from "Trying to go on/Never/going to give up/Without water and without any support" and "Having no strength to go on/It slowly dies" is a pretty weak transition. I would suggest adding a bit more in between those lines, so that the transition seems more gradual, as the death of the rose would be.
All in all though, great concept and interesting poem! Keep up the good work, and thanks for writing!

Hello, Rhia here to review!

First off, I want to mention how rare it is for contemporary poets to write center-formatted poems lately, mostly because of the void of white space and the aesthetic look. However, it is good to be adventurous, and your poem has an interesting shape that draws the reader on, so it works alright for you. As far as format, the only other thing I'd mention is that you might want to put in some breaks in here. It's one continuous thing, which sort of drowns out the conflicting feelings. It would have a much greater dramatic aspect if separated into a stanza of hopeful, a stanza of the struggle and dying. Just a suggestion.

I really like this, but you might want to try expanding, and building up your images here. Do a little bit more showing and less telling. Even simply by improving the vocabulary a bit, little things like that would help.

I liked it overall, and it was really nice to read. Keep it up, keep writing.