i think it's crazy

So........definitely a novel type of poetry! I must say it's an.....unusual poem, and I like it for that. But, for some reason, it gives me a sense of .....incompletion. I don't know why, but the second stanza doesn't sound very good with the phrase "I think it's crazy". It's just my opinion. And also, please punctuate the lines properly (i.e capitalize the first letters at the beginning of each line, and capitalize the "I"s, and put commas at the end of every other line. It'll become even better in that form.

Keep it up!

Mist

Hey, yo, Sunset101! Strange here on this fantastic review day and I have a review for you!

I honestly never read your poetry before, so I came into this poem blind. To be frank, I honestly don't know what to think of it. It has these techniques and vibes that just set this poem up, but at the same time, I feel a sense of insecurity. The main problem with this poem is that there's a huge contrast between what's serious and what's not. Let's jump in, shall we?

To start off with praise, this was short and sweet. You didn't stumble over certain points to make up for earlier, you were straight forward, and you made it easy to read. Now, something I noticed is people think that no capitalization and punctuation makes a poem way better. Some of that is true, but that's only true when the choices make sense.

I felt like you weren't capitalizing because it makes a poem look better. You end every line with a period, which makes it a lot more harder to say it out loud, by the way, but you don't capitalize anything. Why? Why so? You should replace some lines with semi colons and commas to make it look much better.

The theme is unique, but silly at the same time. You were too straight forward in this. "Hey, my dog died, everyone died" and just put it on the platter. The only way people will eat the food is if it's fully cooked. This wasn't. It felt short, and just didn't deliveras much as I hoped it would.

I also feel this is just too bland of a topic. Generic, really. It brought nothing new to the table, save for the delivery. I really wanted to like this, but those factors prevented me to like it as much as I wanted to. It tries a bit too hard to be artistic, though I must admit it does have a good amount of potential.

Good job, keep writing, and stay groovy!

xD. I love the crazy vibe. It just rubs off on me and wants me to do something crazy, and I love the story it tells, how it ends is great. I like that it isn't sane, I like it to be insane, I love the way you made it insane, I love the crazy themes. It was very interesting to read for being so short.

Hah, yet another crazy theme! I think it's really the craziest of all. But, I am still trying to get the meaning out of it.
The time fleets. What belongs to you today, belonged to someone yesterday and Will be someone else's tomorrow. Change is the law of the universe. So, it's crazy to feel down over the loss. Think and act positively. Happiness will be at your door.

I hope I got it:)

This is a really interesting poem
Not all poetry has to be sane, you know what I mean? This is just mindless and there is a beauty to this. I love how it has structure. After I read it I was just like what in the world did I just read and that is what makes it awesome. The stories starts off sad and then gets happy at the ends. This was a strange poem, but keep up the good job. Have a good day.

Lovely. I love the picture~ ^^