Stay Away

I love this poem! I love the four line stanzas it really show separation throughout the poem; each one tells a different story. And each of those come together to form a very well flowing poem. Only thing, not a biggy, in the line that says: "It feels like knife wound." You might be missing an 'a'. But all together great poem. Job Well Done!

Hi there!! I am not that good at making reviews and this is only my second one so it wont be that good sorry.

Now to start I would like to say that I agree with EverWinter when it comes to word choice. The poem was very good, but the words you used made it looked a little dull.
Also, is that it seemed to me that you tried really hard to make this poem have a constant rhythm.
My advice would be to use your own words, not make them all end with the same sound. Just make it sound that you mean it.

But I really liked this poem, and the title was perfect.
It was an attention grabber. I love it, keep writing!

-P.W

Hey! EverWinter here for a review!

I think your poem was written very well. It had a nice flow and the rhythm was superb. I have a some word choice suggestions for you though.

"I am explosive" to "I'm an explosive"

"I'll hold back those blows" to "I'll hold back these blows"

"I feel harmfull" to "I am harmful"

"Please don't get near" to "Please don't come near"

"Don't try and stay" to "Don't try to stay"

"Don't come closer" to "Don't come any closer"

"And then gone on to deceive" to "And then tried to deceive"

"It pours over like a river" to "It pours like a river"

"I'd rather it hurt myself" to "I'd rather hurt myself"

"So you're safe from the hit" to "So you will not get hit"

"I've been released from mental jail" to "I'm free from my own made jail"

Those are the only things that I would suggest. It really is quite good, it just upsets my reading with those few inconsistencies. It was great! I loved it!

Ever