I have so much pain inside
Grief, Anger, Depression, Hurt.
Why are they there?
Why won't they fade
My life doesn't suck
I think it's decent
It isn't that bad
So what is inside?
Why does it feel that way
And why won't it leave?
Who is causing this
Please will you stop?
And then there is that new feeling
It twists my guts around
Forming a snake pit of emotions
It's all because of Boy
We all know Boy
For some people
Its name is 'Girl'
You know who I mean
That person who entered
Who came from stage left
And injected turmoil
Into your already unbalanced hormones
Is this all his fault?
Or is He my relieving drug?
I want him to leave
But that would really hurt
I want him to stay
I want him to be here
I want him to smile
And sooth all these feelings
He doesn't know this
Should he?
Should I tell him?
I need to...
But I can't
Because these thoughts stay inside
They are pale and pasty
Like a obsessed gamer
They are deprived of light
Destined to be hidden
Kept away from people
Because they need to
His reaction is a terrifying prospect
Will he be happy, or not?
Is rejection lying in my near future,
Or will he accept my brokenness.
How shall I get rid of these feelings?
Some people resort to drugs
They get high to drown out the lows
Maybe, but probably not.
Addiction is bad
And drugs are a no
So what else is there?
Drinking is nice, but also not good
Because it's also addictive
So out with the D's and in with the..
What else is there?
Pain.
Ah, yes. Pain.
Everyone has a best friend
I have two
One is music
Those beautiful notes
Intertwining perfectly
Knitting a scarf of bliss
That I wear gladly
But pain is there too
Always guarding my back
It is not good for me
But I always come back to it
So my best friends are good and bad
My emotions are calm and explosive
My life is bad through the good
And nothing is ever simple.
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This piece is really great actually! Your opening stanza works well together, but for constructive criticism purposes, you begin to speak to this outside entity that is causing all the pain and discomfort with life. It would flow really well together if you kept going on with that. It would show more anger or disappointment (which is the feeling I get from this piece.) But in conclusion, I feel the image you are creating within the whole poem together, and I love whenever I am able to connect with a piece.
Hello this is Thesky or for short Sky
This was really good I liked how it was a lot of felling there isn't that much to figure out. You might want to go back and take a look at the whole thing for mistakes.
"I have so much pain inside
Grief, Anger, Depression, Hurt.
Why are they there?
Why won't they fade
My life doesn't suck
I think it's decent
It isn't that bad
So what is inside?
Why does it feel that way
And why won't it leave?
Who is causing this
Please will you stop?"
In this part I believe I connect the most I really feel what it is saying.
Hello this is Thesky or for short Sky
This was really good I liked how it was a lot of felling there isn't that much to figure out. You might want to go back and take a look at the whole thing for mistakes.
"I have so much pain inside
Grief, Anger, Depression, Hurt.
Why are they there?
Why won't they fade
My life doesn't suck
I think it's decent
It isn't that bad
So what is inside?
Why does it feel that way
And why won't it leave?
Who is causing this
Please will you stop?"
In this part I believe I connect the most I really feel what it is saying.