Yes I am sad
Yes I am hurt
But no, you cannot know
Yes I am alone
Yes I need Help
But no, you cannot tell
Shh, it's a secret
Yes I'm depressed
Yes I want out
But please, stay quiet
Shh, it's a secret
We all carry that pain
That hurt deep down inside
But no we won't tell
We can't tell
Because it's a secret
It hides deep in our soul
Shh, it's a secret
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I absolutely love this. Nobody is always happy, we all have days where we just want to stay home in our rooms and cry and sleep and never come out. Everyone has a story but nobody wants to get to know it. But what you have to do is not let anyone bring you down and try to see the bright side of things because in the end you'll finally be happy.
Hello! Tigerlilly here for a quick review!
Wow! I felt almost as if I could hear someone reading this out loud to me, and it holds a very powerful message. It flows well and the rhymes are just right and don't seem forced. But the thing I love most about this poem is that it tells the story of every single person, because each person has that one thing they carry around. Whether it be an embarrassing moment or depression, we each hold our own secret. You portray this concept incredibly well, and I absolutely love this poem.
Keep writing, and have a nice day.