Hi. this is kman134. i'm here to review your work.
You referenced the lullaby "Twinkle Twinkle little star" and gave ti an existential twist to the lyrics. the way it was written was pretty thought provoking. the beautifully haunting view of the night sky was well descriptive as every philosopher discusses staring into the void to find meaning in the world.
the second part turned from beautiful and emotionally cathartic, to depressing and somber. it repetitively mentions the loss of happiness and childhood when morning comes and you no longer dream as you step back into the nihilistic cynical reality known as the real world.
the emotional overtone of the poem was spot on, shifting from happiness to sadness in an instant, and the metaphors were well-written.
Anyway,this was pretty good. i hope you write more.
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