The end of the world as we know it,
May soon prove to be a lie.
But for all that I know about it,
We may all just lay down and die.
feel free to add more........
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Short, sweet, and to the point, BUT, it would be much better if it was longer. You really start to get a feel for a poem and the words are set into the rhythm at about the second or third--or even fourth, if the poem rhymes--line. Now, if this were written Haiku style, that wouldn't be a problem. But since it's not, I suggest you add more to this poem. Make it...oh, I don't know...ten or so lines longer? I suggest you do work on it, though!
Umm... too short to be critiqued. It reminds me of a song my brother sang to me once. Haha. Never mind. Are you sure this isn't from a song? And what do you mean by add more? These forums are for critiquing.
~Jamie