Hey there singerofthenight!
I really did enjoy reading your poem! You used description very well, and I loved your use of effective imaginary. It was really original and unique.
The other reviewers, especially Suzanne, have said pretty much everything that I would say. In that case, there's no real need for me to repeat what they've already said!
One thing I have to say though is that I think you need to be a bit more descriptive. By descriptive, I mean explain the emotions more. Why is the speaker crying? Why are they angry? What has caused the speaker to feel like this? You've done a very good job when it comes to being descriptive about emotions, you just need to explain the cause of the emotions!
All pain evaporates.
I loved your choice of wording in this line. It has stayed within the weather theme, yet you are describing the emotions. Well done for that, it's very effective in my opinion!
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Overall, I really did like your poem! Be a bit more descriptive when it comes to reasons behind the emotions, and you will have a great poem!
Keep writing,
xoxo Skins
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