Black Rose

This is a beautiful poem! I love it with all my heart! It sounds so dark and pleasurable, just lustful, and evil.

This is amazing! I love the wonderful description you have that just brings it to life. This is especially my favorite part:

Black with red veins labyrinth on the petals,

drenched with dew.

This was great i loved this poem. My favorite line is "Black with red veins labyrinth on the petals," it was really descriptive. The format was nice and neat. Keep writing this is great.

Helo there, I like how you describe the black rose as 'her'(a lady) because it has a connection with femininity. I love the fantasy poem even though it outside the box thought, it can still be rated as 'the reality that lost', this poem is indeed a symbolism.
~Black with red veins labyrinth on the petals,
fast beats like a heart, drenched with dew. This is my favorite part anyway!
Although black roses symbolize something dark, here you are making it a genuine woman.Good job!

Hi

DreamWork

This is a fictional poem but you say here many things that fells a reality. Here you describe a special time interval of rose flower. In this poem you try to represent a awesomeness of rose and you achieve it well. Finally this is a nice poem because beauty have never ends. But we aspect little more because this poem is too short. Few lines of this poem is really un-comparable but some were I confused like first line of first stanza. When we ignore some things like first line, length of the poem and limitation of your writing then it is amazing.

please think about these things when you write again any poem. You have really a great skill of writing poems keep it up. I hope you understand what I want to say. If you not getting my point then please shoot me a PM.
with regard
Shubham

This is an awesomely written piece. The descriptiveness of the flower was some of the best i have ever seen. The first line i absolutely love I don't think it can get much better than that in the descriptiveness of a rose. Some of the things that seem to bother me are the third and fourth line of the poem. "She's dancing with fairies at night; witnessed by the moonlight.
And greets the morning light that pierced over her soft velvet skin." I cant help but feel if you put maybe a bit more time into this section that you could have gotten a much better flow out of it. Perhaps something like this "Shes dancing with the fairies at night; witness by the moonlight. And greets the morning gaze that pierced over her soft velvet skin." Thats just my personal touch to make it to me flow a little better. A couple of words can make all the i feel with any kind of poetry and makes a huge difference with the transitions into new lines to make the flow much more smooth and enjoyable to the mind. "The silent night, keeping her secrets." is an amazing line i feel. The night always tends to keep secrets that's why i believe so many crimes are committed at night and most infidelity. But soon after the line "The morning glory, dawning upon her" i feel like this line took away from the previously amazing line. Perhaps it should have been "The morning glory, exposing her" or something along those lines. Finally the ending line was perfect and wrapped the poem up beautifully. Your work is amazing and i love reading your pieces. Keep up the writing

Hey there!
Musicgirl5001 here
So I really like this poem and it's very detailed.
In the first line "Black with red veins labyrinth on the petals," Was that supposed to be all one phrase or was their supposed to be a comma between veins and labyrinth?
I was kind of confused on that first line.
I really like the story behind the poem because it could mean anything to the reader or the writer.
Maybe you could have put a little more, but other than the stuff I said everything was amazing!

Alright see ya!

Musicgirl5001

I really like this a lot, and I think you did an excellent taste in poetry and it's really AWESOME!. I love this, I can feel this feeling wrapped up inside of this rose, I can picture this rose, the dew in front of me, i feel like I can reach out and touch it. well done, you did an amazing job at this! Hey, keep on writing I think you have a gift in visual descriptions!

Hey Dream,

This poem is really good. It is very figurative and chocka block with some great imagery.
There are a few puncuation and grammar mistakes, needing to add some 's' at the end of words etc. but I won't go into that.

What I really liked about it was the way it was built and the idea slowly built up.

The line which for me didn't work was
"She dancing with fairies at night; "
I think it is mainly because you mixed up the tenses. It should read (if you want it in present tense) as
"She dances with fairies at night" or "she's dancing with fairies at night"
It's up to you what you use, you also have a few other parts where you mix up tenses. So just be careful with that.

I honestly really love this poem and you did a great job!
Keep writing

Nargles xxx