Young Writers Society

hey there , here's a review for your work
i'll start with the title , it is a very good title , meaningful and expressive .
now for the things i liked about your work :
1-the rhyme : for me it's very hard to make every part of a poem rhyme , but your poem is sooo rhymy and that's what i most liked .
2-the beginning : WOW it's meaningful and defferent , i just liked its idea.
3-this part :
" Who needs love?
How about a real hard shove,
Right into the deep?
Some people count sheep,
I count scars. "
very strong words here ....
ok , sorry if that's not helping but can't find errors , so keep writing

Firstly let me say well done by taking the harder option and taking the time to make it rhyme (see what I did there ). However I feel a couple of the rhymes are a little forced, particularly when you have a full stop between two rhyming couplets. Other than that, well done, and keep on writing!
Take That You Fiend!

Hey Cam!

I did check out your other poem, but you already had, like, four reviews on it, and I couldn't think of anything helpful to say about it-- so I chose not to comment on it. But! Here's a new poem, so I'll just leave you a bit of a review on it...

So, I've warned you that I'm terrible at poetry, so bear with me.

Your rhythm and pacing are nice, for the most part. It feels a bit rushed in a few places, but nothing too severe, so good job there. I like the way you phrased the thoughts of the first several stanzas. It sort of romanticized the idea of death, which was interesting to read. I wasn't a huge fan of your ending, but, then, I don't like those types of conclusions anyway, so I'm probably not a great indicator there. As far as the actual mechanics/flow of it, it was very good~

So, well done. I enjoyed it. 8/10

Hope this helped. If you have any questions or need any more help, don't hesitate to ask.

Keep writing!

~Shady

it is supposed to say "the best of you"