Nothing Like the Sun

I love these goals so much! I love how they aren’t just all number based. I can really see your focus on developing your skill and growing as a writer. That is really inspiring to me! Cannot wait to see your poems and hear about how your reading goes!

I'm so excited to read all of your poems. You are one of my poem idols here on YWS and your poetry is always so simple yet so meaningful! Wish you luck Lim!

Thanks @AilahEvelynMae! Lifelong writerly growth is the dream :')

Thanks so much @AmayaStatham! I feel very honoured that you enjoy my poems!!

Best of luck for NaPo to both of you, too!

Shakespeare! You'll have to keep us updated on your progress reading through the sonnets! I can't wait to see your takes! Ahhhhhh!

I will never not look forward to reading your NaPo - good luck for the month!

@Ventomology I'll do my best!!

@IcyFlame Thank you so much!!

Inspo used from my scrapbook thread:
- Main challenge was: make a claim and support it with a good metaphor
- Run-on sentence and rhetorical question
- Final couplet is a Shakespearan sonnet-style couplet

Notes:
- A poem where the speaker compares themself to a landmass and the addressee to the weather. Not what I expected myself to be writing for NaPo, but it was an interesting exercise.
- This is only lightly edited -- I might have days where I edit the poem more, but lately I feel editing works better if you have some space away from the poem first.

excellent start to NaPo, Lim!! i love the way you write nature imagery ^-^ "for some other heart of mine" is also such a thought-provoking line, and "a silent gardener of trees / that were -- perhaps those yet to be?" has taken up rent-free residence in my brain =P also awesome job reading over a fifth of your goal so far!! you got this!! >:D

Thanks so much for the encouragement @Spearmint!! I'm glad you liked the tree line, that was one of my faves too Best of luck with your NaPo as well!

This one is thematic inspiration! I took the topic of 'poetry' and wrote poetry about it like Shakespeare did in Sonnet 17. I also tried to stick to a continuous motif of images - fire/heat/light. I did add in the "underwater" to represent the parts of poetry that are fanciful/unrealistic
(though you can have volcanoes/ heat underwater I guess haha).

I tried to use iambs in most of it, but it's certainly not iambic pentameter. Nonetheless, this one still sticks to a broadly sonnet-like structure.

As always your poetry is a delight to read Lim. XD I stopped by to say that I really liked that second one. It definitely stood out. ^^

Thanks for commenting, @AmayaStatham! I like that second one too

Based the technique off of Sonnet 24, where there are two things ('gaze'/body and 'looking at/ making paintings') consistently related to one another through figurative language, even if not explicitly via a simile. Here it is cloth/textiles and forests, plus a little extra in the title.

I brainstormed for this poem by writing down the following:

Truths | stretched, like a fabric | like a terrain

Beliefs | adjusted, like a fabric | landscaping

Evidence | curated, like a fabric display / textile selection | mapped / map-making (i.e. highlighting particular landmarks and giving a certain perspective of the world)

Familiar terrains and landscaping: forests, lawn grass, gardens, weeding, campus map

I also took inspiration from lines in an old poem of mine called 'One drop more': “Lyric lines are stretching truths across the desert gravel,/ Long mirages slowly shore their blue by one drop more.”

I think the rhythm of On Stretching Truths works best in the third stanza, but is a bit more awkward in the first two.

Inspired by the wordplay in Sonnet 26:

To thee I send this written embassage
To witness duty, not to show my wit

I might have another try at this with a more serious-sounding poem.