Feed The Pink Elephant! [Open!]

*Stumbles into thread* "What am I going to do with all this pink elephant food?"

Oh, hello Shearwater.

Would you take a look at this when your not too busy? It's (general) Fantasy, no title yet though (can't think of one).
work.php?id=95343
work.php?id=95346

It's the first chapter of the book I've been working on recently. (Split in two parts because is kind of long - over 4,000 words) This is the "revised edition" of Ch. 1. But I'm looking for more feedback to make it even better

I know there are other's ahead of me, so I will be patient and wait.

Hi there! I was wondering if you would review my story? It's a fantasy/action story. I wrote it for my English class and it would be nice to have it reviewed. If you're up for it here's the link and the name. Once A Friend and work.php?id=95312

(Feel free to offer a different title suggestion. )

could you review the first chapter of a novel I'm working on? thanks,
work.php?id=95420

Guess what? I've just posted the prologue to my story. I'd love if you could take a look-http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=95533

Thanks in advance. And take your time. I can see that your forum is filled with requests.

All done!

Keep the food coming. :3

When you have the time -
work.php?id=95605

If you are not busy

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=95629

It is a short story, and it is Fantasy/Other.

Thank You.

NHNT

I so enjoyed your last review, I would love it if you could find the time to take a look at this. work.php?id=95236 It's the second chapter of the previous work.

Hi, could you review my story's prologue? It's my first book and I'd really appreciate it!

Title: The Arc: Prologue

hope you like it!

It's posted on the young writers society website.

Hey Shearwater,

I've completed Ch.2 of my story and it's up now. This one was pretty challenging, any advice you have to make it better would be awesome.

work.php?id=95667

I didn't split this one into parts, so it might be a long read. Sorry about that.
Your reviews are great, so I'm willing to wait. Take your time, there is no rush. Thanks in advance!

Done!

Thank you:)

Hi Shearwater!

I have two different works that need work and since I saw this I was wondering if you could review both of them (or maybe just one!).

The first one is a free verse-no rhyme poem called "Lost Secrets"

work.php?id=94626

The second one is a mystery script called "Causes Unknown". I wrote this at a writing convention thing and this is my first script...

work.php?id=93234

I'd just like to let you know that they need a lot of work and so please do not shy away from finding every mistake!

Thank you so much!!

Hello again Shearwater,

I have returned to ask for your review of Chapter 3: (broke it up into parts again)
part 1: work.php?id=95978
part 2: work.php?id=95979

(I tried to implement your advice from last time by making flashbacks more to-the-point.)

Whenever you get around to it is fine, I'm a patient person. Thanks in advance!

Hey there Would you mind reviewing the first bit of my novel The Code of Black? http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=95887
It's in the science fiction/fantasy genre. Thanks!