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Sat Nov 21, 2009 3:35 am

Shearwater says... · Sat Nov 21, 2009 3:35 am

Will Review
Novels
Short Stories
Scripts
Art
Poetry
Other

Might Consider
Fanfiction
Non-Fiction
Lyrics

Instructions
Provide a link please!

Side Note: I enjoy reading your feedback.

-S

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There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
-W. Somerset Maugham

Fruits_Basket99Tohru

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Sun Nov 22, 2009 2:47 am

Fruits_Basket99Tohru says... · Sun Nov 22, 2009 2:47 am

Hi Pink, this is Fruit!

I'm so happy to find someone who will gladly review FanFiction!

So could you please review my 1st story? Pretty please? (xD)

Here is the link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=54552; it
's called SSBB New Adventure Story FanFiction. It's based on the Super Smash Bros. Brawl (SSBB) game for Wii, so I would like to know if you could still understand the story even if you haven't heard of SSBB before.

Also, nit-picks are fine, and if you know about SSBB and its Adventure Mode, I want to know how you think I did on that aspect as well. Thank you in advance! :smt001

"We're all born with selfish desires, so we can all relate to those feelings in others. But kindness is something made individually by each person...so it's easy to misunderstand when others are trying to be kind to you."
--Fruits Basket Book 1, page 134

Do you need a review?

Shearwater

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Sun Nov 22, 2009 5:23 am

Shearwater says... · Sun Nov 22, 2009 5:23 am

Fruits-Done.

Anyone else? =D
I do provide exquisite cookies...

There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
-W. Somerset Maugham

Mo.

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Sun Nov 22, 2009 9:48 am

Mo. says... · Sun Nov 22, 2009 9:48 am

Hey Pink! Can you review my drawing? Here's the link:

I Love my Music.

Mo. was here.

mwahahaha

Shearwater

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Sun Nov 22, 2009 3:34 pm

Shearwater says... · Sun Nov 22, 2009 3:34 pm

Mo.-Done

Anyone else need a review?

There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
-W. Somerset Maugham

Shearwater

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Tue Nov 24, 2009 9:24 pm

Shearwater says... · Tue Nov 24, 2009 9:24 pm

Anybody?
Please

hahaa

There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
-W. Somerset Maugham

Rascalover

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Fri Nov 27, 2009 6:17 am

Rascalover says... · Fri Nov 27, 2009 6:17 am

Romantic fiction: Let Me Love You

this is chapter 12

Brief description of what has happened before: Isabella was in a car accident a few days later her boyfriend whose in a band breaks up with her. Jay, the boyfriend, has a cousin named Gary and that how Isabella met Jay. He is also in the band. He consoles Isabella cause theyre best friends and they slowly fall in love. He treats her to a weekend get away and gives her a promise ring to always love her. But now shes pregnant and she doesnt know what to do. whether to tell him or not.

link: topic54963.html

Please review thanks,
Tiffany

There is nothing to writing; all you do is sit down at a typewriter and open a vein~ Red Smith

Who needs a review?

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic38078.html

SpencerNolanRivers

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Fri Nov 27, 2009 5:26 pm

SpencerNolanRivers says... · Fri Nov 27, 2009 5:26 pm

Here is the first chapter of a novel I'm working on. Here is the link topic54952.html It's a fantasy piece.

House: People interest me. Conversations don't.
Foreman: Maybe because conversations go both ways.
House & Foreman: Like Thirteen.

Shearwater

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Fri Nov 27, 2009 10:54 pm

Shearwater says... · Fri Nov 27, 2009 10:54 pm

Rascalover-Done.

I enjoyed your story, I might just go back and read the beginning if I have the chance.

There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
-W. Somerset Maugham

Shearwater

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Sat Nov 28, 2009 7:19 am

Shearwater says... · Sat Nov 28, 2009 7:19 am

KikiSaysRAWR!-Done.

Whoo!
Anyone else?

:elephant:

There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
-W. Somerset Maugham

*coco

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Thu Dec 03, 2009 6:31 pm

*coco says... · Thu Dec 03, 2009 6:31 pm

Hey, could you please check out my story when you're not too busy, I know it's quite long but I'd love to hear what you think of it so far. Here are the links:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53716.html (chapter 1)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53746.html (chapter 2)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53800.html (chapter 3)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53888.html (chapter 4)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic54024.html (chapter 5)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic54589.html (chapter 6)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic55095.html (chapter 7)

Thanks so much!

"Do you know what my heart says now? It says that I should forget about politics and be with you. No matter what. You're a true Queen, a Queen any King would kill for." - Prince Francis ♕

Shearwater

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Fri Dec 04, 2009 2:08 am

Shearwater says... · Fri Dec 04, 2009 2:08 am

Hi *coco
You've got a long list there so I can't promise you I'll finish it fast. But I will review them, just give me some time =]
I'll continue to edit this post as I finish reviewing your chapters.

Chapters
One: *reviewed
Two: *reviewed
Three:*reviewed
Four:*reviewed
Five:*reviewed
Six:*reviewed
Seven:*reviewed

-meanwhile, I'll still be taking other reviews.
:elephant:

_____________________________
phew, finished.

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There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
-W. Somerset Maugham

anima9

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Thu Dec 10, 2009 12:17 am

anima9 says... · Thu Dec 10, 2009 12:17 am

Oh please! I need your time and patience. Please review my chapter 2!

A Little Fantasy Chapter 2: Never Forgotten
topic55391.html

I will be grateful to your generous and kind efforts.

http://fatedblue.wordpress.com/

FOR PEOPLE WITH LESS THAN 3 REVIEWS: MUST READ

You MUST make a review of at least 3-4 works BEFORE posting your own. Otherwise your works will get unnoticed. So please, upon reading this, REVIEW!

Maintain the ratio of 3:1 meaning 3 reviews per work submitted.

Shearwater

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Thu Dec 10, 2009 4:29 am

Shearwater says... · Thu Dec 10, 2009 4:29 am

anima9-Done.

Anyone else??? I'm free!

There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
-W. Somerset Maugham

leeanna13097

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Fri Dec 11, 2009 5:52 am

leeanna13097 says... · Fri Dec 11, 2009 5:52 am

I have a story called Written in Blood! It's romance fiction (though the prologue doesn't exactly have love in it). I'd REALLY love it if you would review it. Here's the link --> topic55433.html

BTW, it's just the prologue, so it doesn't exactly tell you what the story is ACTUALLY about; it just kind of gives you a glimpse of the past. One day soon I'll get the first chapter up, though!

Thanks!!

Please forgive me if I over-edit anything of yours.

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