Deanie's Reviewing Business II

I wrote a poem. It's the first one I've written in a long time and I don't think it's that good. I would love to here what you think and I'd love to be given some advice: "I Would Kill Myself"

@Lightsong, I reviewed your poem School Kids even though you changed things! I thought because it was taking me so long to get to things I'll just throw it in as extra

@InfiniteRectangles, I am done with your poem!

@Lightsong, I reviewed your other poem too now

It's Britney bitch.

Jk, it's me.

So basically, I've decided to re-post the edited version of The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (always such a mouthful to type), and as someone who read the original version it would be super appreciated if you could take a look at the edited version. The first chapter isn't majorly different, and I'm not sure at which edited stage you actually read it, but I'd really appreciate your feedback on it!

The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter One)

Please and thank you! :3

@MissGangamash I'm done with your extract and am slowly gonna keep working through your novel! While also reviewing other things :3

Hi there! Would you kindly review my poem Mon Dernier Amour?
Thank you very much for your time.

Hi Deanie,

I would be thankful if you could please review the first chapter of a novel I just started:

work/na3f/Brother-Moon-Sister-Sun--Chapter-1-127285

Hi Deanie how are you I have a novel Named the Seven Heavenly Kings that I have been working on for a while and I would really appreciate if you could review it for me. A few people have reviewed already and I made some changes based on the advice they have given me and would like to see if there are any more improvements that can be made. Thank you for your time. The Seven Heavenly Kings Revamped

Hey! I'm Jay Walker. I'm really unsure as to how good all my works are, though I already have a couple reviews on my works. I love to as many opinions as possible. (I really value other people's opinions.)
If possible, I'd like for you to all four chapters of Words Written in Lighting, but it's okay if you only do the first chapter.
Words Written in Lightning is a Action/Adventure Fantasy Novel.
The first chapter is here:
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 1
Second chapter:
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 2
Third chapter:
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 3
Fourth chapter:
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 4
Thanks!

@BellaRoma just writing your last review now. Then I'll be finished with your works, so let me know when you post the last part!

Hey, please review Bad Lights, Good Lights [Chapter 8.3]!

You didn't specify if you review shorts or not... Would you mind doing this one for me?

Treasure Every Moment

EDIT: I revised it, here's the new version.
The Seer and the Griffin Tamer

Hello Deanie!

I'd love it if you could review the first chapter of my novel False Gods. It's a YA/ Sci-Fi about a hacker who bites off a little more than she can chew!

False Gods - Sunday Bloody Sunday (Chapter 1)

Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!

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