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Re: Discomfort of Home
Hey, First of all welcome to YWS ForeverRebel! Now, your story was one great piece and frankly speaking I enjoyed reading it. It is a little common though as I ...
Jun 11, 2013 -
Re: The Revenge
Hey, First of all a warm welcome to YWS. I just read your story and trust me when I say that it was great. The plot is amazing, the storyline ...
May 31, 2013 -
Re: Delusion
Hey Catnip, I can see a line after each 'line' If that's what you did then I prefer you to remove it and if it's just n my laptop then ...
May 14, 2013 -
Re: Delusion
Hey, First of all great poem, I enjoyed reading it and believe me I felt it as an amazing one. You definitely are a great poet and I would recommend ...
May 14, 2013 -
Re: homestuck fanfic: the pink blood {part one}
HEy mi7un4c4p70r, I will be reviewing your work today. Okay as this is your first time, excellent job. I really liked the concept and your base seems strong too, that's ...
May 12, 2013 -
Re: The Unknown Planet Chapter 2: Angrom
Hey Jordin, Great story there, amazing Idea! Well there were a few mistakes, grammatical actually but overall it was great. But as if it where flickering it disappeared the huge ...
May 10, 2013 -
Re: Riot For Goodwill Or Vile....
Hey, I just read you're poem and it is great! It just lacks punctuation so below I have done that for you "Goodness is depleting! Every soul indifferently has fostering ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: It Belongs To Me, Only Me
Hey ACHU, First of all, You're vocabulary is really great so good job on that. But here comes the thing, there are TOO many hard words here and on top ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: Vista of Moonlit Night
Hey, First of all Welcome to YWS (again) and for starters I think this poem was comparatively good. Have you heard of the saying "Short but sweet" It totally applies ...
Apr 26, 2013 -
Re: Dark Thoughts. (Written By Me)
HEY! Umaima here to review your submission today! Your story was great, I had fun reading it and it was clear to but it had a few grammatical mistakes... one ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: Chapter Nine of The Lost Legend - The Fall of Vaetrion.
Hey! umaima here to review your submission! Okay first of all awesome story. I enjoyed reading it and i really have to ask you a question, How many times have ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: My Life's Worth
Hey! umaima here to review your submission today! First of all happy review day! Now coming to your story, Well interesting peice, it is attension grabbing and I enjoyed reading ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: Chronical Adventure: Setting and Details
Hey! First of all happy review day. Umaima here to be your reviewer. First of all I am totally agreeing with LouisCypher here because even I have no idea of ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: From The Diary of Charlotte Gilman
Hey! This is umaima and I am going to review your submission today! There were a few mistakes in your poem so I have corrected them below: "The yellow wallpaper; ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Beast
Hey! Umaima here to review your submission today! "It lingered in the air as if it were a physical being" It should be was instead of were here "it may ...
Mar 31, 2013