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Hey,
I just read you're poem and it is great!
It just lacks punctuation so below I have done that for you
"Goodness is depleting!
Every soul indifferently has fostering dreams for life.
Attitude towards life is changing,
Depriciating lifestyle is the resultant of cause.
There is a great convolution and imbalance between different sects of people,
Pointing each other for ones own faulty things is irrelevant.
As modernized we become, as compressively we ponder over things.
It is not the matter of lacking time in due course of routine,
But is our lethargic quality that we hesitate to find time.
The place where there is quench and thirst to know more,
Is the born rights for wisdom and righteousness.
Reasoning out our activities is the deliberate provoke to set matters right,
Bothering and sobbing alone should not be the rational expressions for life."
In this line there is a spelling mistake. It's Depreciating not depriciating.
That's all, You're poem was really great and I would prefer you to keep writing!
Good luck for your next piece.
Umaima
This is interesting I must say! I like the message and the mood is completely aggressive. I could imagine a guy with a bullhorn yelling to a crowd of people. The word choices you used were really good too. Powerful words with a lot of connotation is always good. Short, concise, meaningful, and well structured. Good job.
Thanks a lot. I will be really much interested to note my goodwill and dowdish part of writing like this.
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Goodness is depleting
Every soul indifferently has fostering dreams for life.
Attitude towards life is changing
Depriciating lifestyle is the resultant of cause
There is a great convolution and imbalance between different sects of people
Pointing each other for ones own faulty things is irrelevant
As modernized we become, as compressively we ponder over things
It is not the matter of lacking time in due course of routine
But is our lethargic quality that we hesitate to find time
The place where there is quench and thirst to know more
Is the born rights for wisdom and righteousness
Reasoning out our activities is the deliberate provoke to set matters right
Bothering and sobbing alone should not be the rational expressions for life
This was a very well written piece of work. You have used a wide vocabulary and this carries a deep and brilliantly woven message.
Keep up the good work and I'd love to see more like this.
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Thanks a lot. I am 14 and trying to find a right platform to enhance my learning and thirst for this. I am actually interested in writing philosophies. I will grateful if you let me know about more on this literary side.