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  • Poetry » General, General Re: I'll make you regret the day you gave up on me.-DAR

    My heart is full of good intention and you are surely a beautiful butterfly, so don't take these words in a harsh way. Maybe if this were put to some ...

    Oct 5, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Lyrical Re: faith is trash talk to the broken

    There's something both really abstract and really concrete here about this poem, all to the point of me being like, "I think I like it." I'm weary on poetry, that's ...

    Oct 5, 2013
  • Short Story » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: If it is possible to erase our memories, will I still fall in love with her all over again?

    Have you ever seen a movie called Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind? Well... yeah. Anyway, I have a lot to say about this. I'm sort of immediately turned off ...

    Aug 9, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Collarbone

    So this was pleasant. Just a very smooth ride, which in poetry can be a difficult thing to achieve. So, that being said, I'm going to take a few nitpicks ...

    Aug 9, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: I need to write.

    I didn't think I was going to like this, but it ended up like that. I kind of wish you could expand on it. I understand it's supposed to be ...

    Aug 9, 2013
  • Poetry » Horror, General Re: blood on my tombstone

    I just don't get it. Maybe it's my own ignorance. Maybe it's Maybelline. But we'll just proceed. I enjoy the obscure visions of darker poetry [that Dickinson girl is bomb], ...

    Jun 26, 2013
  • Poetry » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: Hollow

    This really doesn't say much to me. I think this perception is summed up in "Life is life." But, like, what IS life? I mean, you're writing a poem about ...

    Jun 26, 2013
  • Script » Dramatic, Theatre Re: In On A Secret

    I love it. The ONE thing I have to say is if we're watching from outside the script, we don't know anyone's names besides Joffery and Markus. If this were ...

    Jun 17, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Lock with no key

    Greetings. I have to say it's certainly not atrocious, and while I would have to agree with Flow for a large bit of this review, I'll elaborate on a few ...

    Jun 17, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Happiness

    I like it, in general. There's nothing really to dislike about it other than the feeling that it's really lacking a lot of what it could possibly contain. I mean, ...

    Jun 15, 2013
  • Short Story » General, Romantic Re: The Lost Love Found

    A few things: I'm pretty sure amusement parks don't open as early as 8 am. Usually around 10-11 ish. "She was holding a little and the most innocent and adorable ...

    Jun 10, 2013
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Dramatic Re: fracture

    You know, it's simple, but I kind of like that. It's a little generic of a topic, but it feels genuine and I like that too. A lot of poems ...

    May 20, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Unbearable...

    Contradicting what Kaylyn says, no, you do not need any periods and commas. It might frustrate some readers because they think that sort of thing applies to poetry but the ...

    May 20, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Like Glass

    Hm... OK. It's a little stiff. That might be the word I'm looking for. Or heavy, but not the emotional kind of heavy, but like the "I want this poem ...

    May 20, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Caged Bird and the Caged Lady

    Commas do not equal breaths or pauses. There are far too many in here, and it's making me feel like an asthmatic while I read this. You have good structure, ...

    May 17, 2013


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