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Hmmm thought provoking and very smooth! Lovely just truly....I can feel the poem definatley! However,poem, not really. It would make a super song if you add a guitar and accent ...

"Would ever those days will become nowadays?" huh? A little long . I am not really a fan of the whole every line in a stanza an actual sentence but ...

Oh my gosh ! AMAZINGLY BEAUTIFUL! This is the sweetest thing ever! I'm like the punctuation poliece so don't hate me ( to be honest I didn't even notice first ...

I disagree with Rei, the "as you need I" upon closer inspection make it flow better then saying something such as "a you need me" because it kind of continues ...

Okay let me just get this negativity out of the way, your rhyming scheme was not constant and your punctuation was a little off (coammas,periods, and capitalization misplaced or not ...

I agree with lovelysayshi, the double negative "no nothing" really doesn't fit or flow and sort of contradicts the whole general theme of the poem. Seems a little choppy at ...

After the first stanza I was sold! Truly amazing and well written ( minus the tecnical diffuculties with the formation of the last few lines.) Best thinbg I have read ...

HI! First off let me just say, amazing! Truly I could feel the emotion pouring out of this poem! It made me feel trapped like the person in the poem ...

Hello there! A little sad... not in a bad way though ;) Very simplistic and expressive, I feel if it had been longer than it would have become sad in ...

I loved it. So much rythem and rhymes, plus at first glance it looks very nice because of how you formed your stanzas!Plus, the message it sends is so true.But ...

Oh nice, makes me wish it was winter... but I can't help wonder what this would be like if it rhymed . Also I love the picture it paints in ...

wow lots of imagery but kind of hard to get at first. Overall really nice, also it's legnth is paints many different images, but I can't help but feel you ...

sorry if you see this post twice Love it! However in the stanza "The Willow cried onto the ground soaking her dry roots not only did she grow that day ...

Short and sweet, I like it! I'm not much of a critic (i spelled it wrong :( ) but outa all 3 I liked the very last one, it was ...

i'm not a very good person to make suggestions (this is better that most of what I write :)). But I really like it and I think it's the perfect ...