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Re: Walk away with me
I really live the repetition of the chorus. Its really beautiful, as is the sentiment of the poem. I can really feel your love and it is touching. However, you ...
Nov 30, 2015 -
Re: I'm Trying to Talk to You
Overall, this is great. You really get the emotion across. I especially love how you never straight out said how you feel - you just said what was happening. This ...
Nov 30, 2015 -
Re: "Her"
Great poem! I love the imagery. However, you could make this even stronger. The great thing about poetry is that, unlike prose, it is not filtered first through the brain- ...
Nov 3, 2015 -
Re: Scritcha Scratcha
Great job! I love the repetition. It really adds to the creepiness and suspense. The great thin about poetry is that it is direct and compact. Its like a brick ...
Nov 2, 2015 -
Re: My friend, Bob
I love the lyrical quality of your piece. I also love the reveal at the end of the poem. The poem is light and funny the rhyming is great too. ...
Nov 2, 2015 -
Re: to be a boy, raised as a girl
This is amazing! Great. The feelings are really present and the reader can hear your emotions through the poem. However, I think that you could expand this even more and ...
Nov 2, 2015 -
Re: Scars
Your description was right! It's amazing! I love it! I especially like the last part where you wrote: But you haven't seen The scars on my heart Because things like ...
Apr 10, 2014 -
Re: Childhood Is Dead
Wow. That was amazing. I think that the awesomeness of a writing can be determined by how long the reader has to wait after he/she has finished reading it and ...
Apr 5, 2014 -
Re: Stereotypes.
Wow! I really like it! There's a very strong message there that I think we can all connect to. Everyone has been the victim of a stereotype. My favorite part ...
Apr 5, 2014 -
Re: night
It's a great poem. I really like it. I don't know if you meant it to be a prose poem, but there is no punctuation. Also, the words should not ...
Apr 5, 2014 -
Re: I fell in love with a boy in five inch heels
Great poem. I love it. I especially love these parts: The smell of his cologne was like crackling firewood. His hair was long and swishy and the colour of warm ...
Apr 4, 2014 -
Re: Nosferatu
Great poem. There were some grammatical errors: That I'M drifting away I HAVEN'T been human for 200 years I think you meant to say "I just go through the motions ...
Apr 4, 2014 -
Re: a senryu of sorts
I love this. It really made me think. I think that one of the signs of great writing is when it makes you think. At the end of the best ...
Apr 3, 2014 -
Re: Under the oak tree
I love it. However, there are some typos: and you TRACED these translucent tracks trailing You picked up a white feather OFF the ground Also the M in Messiah in ...
Apr 2, 2014 -
Re: I was kissed by an older woman.
When I first saw the title I thought it was going to be about a teenager and some older woman. I definitely thought it was going to be voluntary - ...
Apr 2, 2014
