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Your formatting is good, it makes it more fun to read. This is sad. Listening to the years, the blue eyed girl is tired. So sad. Good stuff.

It would be so cool if you added a piece of wisdom at the end. Something you needed to learn when you were younger. Just a thought.

This is a good start to narrative poetry. Have you considered adding more flower / philosophical language to it, to push it toward the poetry side?

So good.

Okay.

Not at all. I thought about the poem because I read it doing a dramatic reading.

Amazing poem, I did a dramatic reading of it in my room. So good. I am practicing with it. I changed some of the words though. Hope you don't mind. ...

Good poem.

Thank you for writing this. I learned a lot about poetry from you.

Your insightful eye morphs Justifying the intimate bonds of expression Use an image here. A small one. Like the word smile and only that word because you will provide context ...

You'll get there. I should have used heavy instead of personal in some of the comments. Good luck!

So good. Can't review.

The door is locked; I can't get by Tug the handle; bang at the door Pet peeve of mine, I don't like using the same word close together, it just ...

You're welcome.

I love short poetry and you did a fantastic job.