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Hi there , Roxy here, and welcome to YWS! Its a nice simple poem, and a good first one to start off your YWS career! A few little things though! ...

Hi there, Roxy here! You hae some lovely ideas and sentences in the poem, for example "Blindfolded walked the plank of love" Its a lovely original lome and I would ...

Hi Roxy here! Starting off, I love the opening line! It really brings the reader into the story and makes them want to read on! The activities that you describe ...

Hi Roxy here! Its a nice simple poem, but its good! However, there are one or two little things! I think that "Or maybe a word, near and dear to ...

Oh wow! I havent been on YWS in a little while and this was a brilliant piece to come back to- the reason I love YWS! I liked how you ...

hiya Roxy here! :) Cute little poem here! but I feel like it could become something truely great! :) You should give a discription of the morning star, describe its ...

Hello! Roxy here! First of I think that this is a beautiful piece! simply wonderful!! "Your ink-polished teeth and your wide, flaming eyes shine, as my words shine, as we ...

Hiya! Roxy here! Okay I'm a little confused at the mo,because its not coming up in a poem form- its a paragraph on my laptop..Did you change it out of ...

Hello! Roxy here! :) I'm loving the poem!! :) One or two things though tomake it even better! ^^ "Blue, orange, red and green." I like the listing of colours, ...

Hello! Roxy here!! Nothing to do with the actual writing, but I think it would be better if you seperated where the lyrics start and your explination of of the ...

Hello! Roxy here! Well this is a very interesting poem indeed! 1. "i" shpuld always be capital!! I know you know that but you seem to have forgotten here! 2. ...

Hello Roxy here! Let me start off by saying you really have tallent as a writter! a few little things though; "My mind is going null," I know it fits ...

Hello Roxy here! I dont usually look at chapters, but sure we'll have ago!! First off you needn't put your name and the name of the chapter in, they're already ...

Hello! Roxy here! an interesting piece! a few little things though! "I look for things in the dark and under the bed. One of these days, I'll figure out that ...

Hello! Roxy here! I really do like this piece!! !! I would love for you to add another few verses beI would love for you to add another few verses ...