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  • Poetry » General, General Re: I didn't have many friends growing up/ but I had plenty of bad influences

    Hi Mongoose here to review!:P First off the poem itself has an incredible story to it, with simple narration you have expressed an enormous amount of emotion and that is ...

    Apr 15, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: From mirrors to outer space

    mongoose here to review! First of all this poem really speaks to me, each line is a perfect representation of how i feel sometimes and I think this was the ...

    Feb 17, 2014
  • Poetry » General, Dramatic Re: You Wonder

    Hi Mongoose here to review I really like your words in this poem, I really do but where's the punctuation? I think even if you want it to be one ...

    Jan 27, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Literature Re: Not connected, Oddly aressted(A teriible, No good,Very, Very Bad Life)

    Hi Mongoose here to review, Wow, this is really powerful, I like how you used your rhyming only at the beginning and end of the poem it highlights he beginning ...

    Jan 27, 2014
  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Moonlight Creek

    Hi Mongoose here. :O my face. I did not expect that... at all. This was brilliant, I hung on your every word, even if i had to look phantasmagorically up ...

    Jan 12, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Boredom

    Hi, mongoose here to review. First of I really like this, it explains my day. Bit weird really. I love this it is a great way to express one day ...

    Jan 12, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Ever Thought of Life?

    Hey mongoose here, Ive never read a poem like this before i must say. Its very to the point and sharp which is good in this intance as the meaning ...

    Nov 10, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: Escape

    Hey mongoose here, As always i love your work brolington! This is really deep, enotion is ladened throughout abd soread like butter, its brilliant. Although it is quite an upsetting ...

    Nov 4, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Spiritual Re: The Marks on the wall by Lewys Monroe Tapscott-Nott

    hey mongoose her Ive read it through, I like the concept you've got going. It s good that the characters have all been introduced well because it i the sort ...

    Oct 28, 2013
  • Short Story » General, Romantic Re: Someday, Somewhere, Sometime

    Hey its mongoose here. This is such a deep short story, the depth of emotion is brilliant! Its really clever how it switche to watch another couple and to wish ...

    Oct 28, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: The Hidden Men

    Hey mongoose here, I really enjoyed this poem it shows how the world really is unfaur in such few lines. I love how it explains wealth and poverty against youth ...

    Oct 27, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Grades don't equal you.

    Hey it's mongoose, This is so cool, it s too true, grades are all a fuss over nothing. People can leave school with nothing and get a low paid job, ...

    Oct 15, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Teen Fiction Re: Red Rimmed: Chapter One.

    Hey, Its mongoose! I'm determined to review every piece of your ongoing book, as soon as you post you've got to tell me!:P I think this was a wonderful start, ...

    Oct 14, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Mystery / Suspense Re: Red Rimmed: Prologue- rewritten

    Hey Mongoose here Clarity, clarity, written again, aha. Love your style though, got to admit its is the best way to improve. I loved this, it was better than the ...

    Oct 14, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Perfection.

    This is so short and snappy! I think its a brilliant way to write a poem, I love that its all one sentence because then the full stop at the ...

    Oct 14, 2013


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