metrophobia

It is really hard to transcend the cliched nature of the metaphor of the broken heart - since it's one of the most classic metaphors in the book... I think ...

Wow this is a pretty moving piece. The dissonance between what the bible says versus how the speaker is experiencing so-called Christians is striking. I like the stanza about the ...

I think this would be a bit more effective it was more focused - you have good concrete, emotional material here, but it feels a bit like a laundry list ...

Some of this felt like it was just talking about the "idea of love" rather than love itself - the poem was quite abstract in that we didn't get a ...

Oh I really dig this poem! It's far more emotional and specific than the last one. The reader gets some sense of the panic setting in, and then there are ...

This kinda walks the line between giddy-nonsense and emotive - and I think you could hype this poem up more by going more solidly in either of those directions, or ...

I would suggest working on connecting the stanzas together, and making the images meaningful. Unless the point of the poem is disconnect or randomness. I interpreted this poem to be ...

The missing apostrophe in the title was fairly intriguing - I was thinking perhaps this was a poem about how multiple dragons came together and formed one tear - I ...

Was expecting something a bit vulgar after the first stanza, but by the end this is darn near eloquent. Creative use of acrostic blend - I wonder if that could ...

I saw below in a comment that this poem was not written metaphorically - which now makes me curious as to what it could be. Who dost hold the light ...

Can not decide whether this is a very cryptic sonnet or a very creative acrostic - what do you call this form? By the way - great variety of "L" ...

Ha! I enjoyed this trip very much. I'm going to interpret the meaning to be, that when one is in the midst of nonsense, comfort comes from unexpected places, especially ...

I like what you've got here, the poem paints a clear story. The house is just a fantastic metaphor to build a lot of emotion around, and I think a ...

You've got a good concept for a pretty impactful poem, especially because on a conceptual level, if words can kill, then what power does a poem have? A lot I ...

Hey temp! So I think you could do a bit more with the poem, don't get me wrong, I'm a fan of short and sweet poems myself, but this one ...