ladcat13

This is so sad! I wrote a poem about a soldier who didn't come home and the wife he left, but I think the last stanza in your poem is ...

Very cute, and clever. I like Katniss as a character. She is, as you put it, bad-ass. I also like the "a flash of braid is all you'll see". Nice. ...

Oh my god that is disturbing! This was so realistic that I shiver. I am so glad I don't think like that. please tell me that you don't. However descriptive ...

Very inspiring. I like how it portrays not only hope and defiance, but a gentle choice. Like a "we're ready when you are" attitude. After all, a victim won't have ...

That was a very sadistic poem. And hateful, and vindictive, and shocking. I like how the narrator sounds very accusing and angry. You nailed that. Although, the ryhme pattern is ...

I like this, its very poetic and brave, though I think that "turn THE other cheek" and "not back down" are kind of contradicting one another. Stubborn and prideful often ...

I like this. It's so haunting, and it describes perfectly the way a thousand-yard stare looks. Have you ever seen someone who was actually like that? because i have. you ...

I love the descriptiveness in this poem! It puts to words perfectly the way that i feel about the moon and moonlight and nighttime in general. I like it much ...

I love how short is, simple and sweet :) I also like the ryhm sheme, how the pattern is there but less discernable, like its somewhere inbetween free verse and ...

I agree with MissCaroline on both the paragraphs and the wonderful details. However, the flow is broken a bit partway into Ch. 1. when she thinks of her father, you ...

That was cute. There were a few run-on sentences, a spelling mistake or two, like "hear and not be hear" (should be "heard" am i correct?) were there. I like ...

I love how you made the tone of this poem accusing, plaintive, longing, and greiving all at the same time. It's short, but it doesn't have to be long to ...

This story was pretty good. Although, some people dont need orphanship as an excuse to feel that way sometimes. Sometimes we dont want others nearby. I like that feeling of ...

This is ok. I really like action fantasy better. I can see its a work in progress. There are, as Iribbon says, lots of other stories of a similar subject. ...

Was the purpose of this story to confuse? It sounded like a seven- year old kid is talking in one big long sentence. Forgive me, but unless this story was ...