Scatty Cat: Return of Conckle Part I

Scatty cat starts everyday. He makes cofee, he makes Toast, then he eats a bannana.  What a fun mornign to partake of!  Sometimes northwash joins him but they kind of dont like eachother right now because (Scatty Cat is addicted to hookers).  So but then he came in, Northwash!  He was like Scattycat help theres problem!  So scattycat went with him and they were at the museum and there was "a bad" guy there.  And it was Conckle again and he was like scattycat we meet again and your ugly so you cant beat me again.  But it wasn't for Scattycat!  So with his ravishing beauty he beat conckel to a pulp but then Conckel was like nooo I lied and then, he was Doctor Lu-Danger!  He was aliving!  So but actually he was.  So he said noo haha you lose this time accualy I'm the devil hhahahha then his face melted off and the clocks turned into spiders and his eyes flew out and scatty Cat exploded but then he woke up and realized it was just the LSD. Wat Will happen next!  Stay tunes?

THE END

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Jonathan
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Hello jordin here with a review for you and the red team so called Hot Sauce.

I hope this helps you out buddy.

What a fun mornign to partake of!
Okay you miss spelled 'morning' you wrote 'mornign'.

So but then he came in,
this is said wrong or written wrong 'So but' is incorrect.

Northwash! He was like Scattycat help theres problem!
this is also said wrong you should say he said 'Help there is a problem.' maybe you could do that if you like.

You know in this here story I can feel some of the feeling that you put in here it was good.

This is you best chapter.

Keep calm write read review and have some good luck.

I hope this helps you out.

~Jon~ :pirate3:

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MelawenWillow
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Hullo!
Huh.
Well, it was very interesting. I liked your word choice. It was creative.
But I don't get it.
I get some of the plot, like how there's Scatty Cat and he saves the day (I think).
Maybe you should incorporate more plot structure and respect more grammar rules. That is, unless this is a joke or you meant it to be confusing. Otherwise, I think you can do something with the idea that would be fun, just revise what you have.

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ladcat13
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Was the purpose of this story to confuse? It sounded like a seven-
year old kid is talking in one big long sentence. Forgive me, but
unless this story was supposed to be confusing or a joke, I don' t
get it. Maybe you should put more periods and capitalizations in.
Also, use quotation marks when someone is talking.



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