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Heya!
I liked this short story. You wrote it in a way that it cold almost be true. There were a few sentences that were too long, at the beginning. Those need full stops. You over used commas. But reading that over yourself will help you find that
There's not really much more I can say. Nice story, happy ending and lovely read.
Deanie x
That was cute. There were a few run-on sentences, a spelling mistake or two, like "hear and not be hear" (should be "heard" am i correct?) were there. I like the happy ending. Happy endings are going out of style lately, but I kinda miss them. But then again, authors can be sadistic when it comes to torturing their readers. I know I do it! But like I said, a happy ending every once in a while is nice. I'm glad that the little puppy became a hero