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Re: A truth, a lie, and a half-truth
Hi there! jessegrey here, leaving you a little review. Wow, this was pretty powerful. The overall fragile feeling is lathered all over the piece, and it's really emotional. I definitely ...
Sep 10, 2017 -
Re: Isolated- Chapter one (parts one and two)
This reads more like a blog post than perhaps a story. I don't know if that was the intended effect or not, but if it was, I would consider breaking ...
Aug 6, 2017 -
Re: Does Clickbait Work on Poetry?
This title literally made me cackle way too hard! So thank you for that haha. I wasn't expecting for the entirety to just be a play on the title's subject ...
Aug 6, 2017 -
Re: Love
This was a warm read, very good for the heart. I would watch the capitalization towards the end, I don't think it's really needed all that much. And the obvious ...
Aug 6, 2017 -
Re: Death
This was beautiful! I was hooked from "mournful goodbye". I love those two words together. It gave me an overwhelming sense of mourning and sadness, but in a heartwarming way, ...
Aug 6, 2017 -
Re: 10 Pounds of Sadness
Aside from the grammatical errors here and there, and the occasional punctuation mishap, I really enjoyed reading this. The repetition of the title throughout the poem was a nice place ...
Aug 6, 2017 -
Re: Kindness
Hi there! I clicked because I liked the title and I just wanted to leave a review here. I love how everything flowed and how everything was separated. It was ...
Aug 6, 2017 -
Re: Apathy
Firstly, I love the title. Apathy is just a beautiful word, visually, and I just have to admit to having a sort of soft spot for it as to why ...
Jul 27, 2017 -
Re: A Sanctified Heart
Upon reading this song, I immediately heart a particular rhythm in my head. I kept nodding my head along, and everything had this certain flow about it. For some reason, ...
Jul 27, 2017 -
Re: Mirror talk
I love how chaotic this feels, and I mean that in the best way. A few lines I absolutely loved were "love was fine before it got desperate." Something about ...
Jul 27, 2017 -
Re: Sharp Edges
Though this may be short, I found it to be very powerful. I found myself thinking back to times where I definitely could identity with what she is feeling and ...
Jul 27, 2017 -
Re: And Then You Became the Moon
Alright, I just love this. It's taken me a few times re-reading certain parts because I was just so in love with the way you wove the diction and told ...
Jul 25, 2017 -
Re: The Red Light
For some reason, the word "pervading" completely threw me off and I had to Google it haha. So thank you for the vocab lesson. I absolutely love "storm of isolation", ...
Jul 25, 2017 -
Re: Stranger
Very thoughtful language, considering how short it is. I would suggest maybe a comma after soul instead of the hyphen. I first thought that you were about to describe something ...
Jul 25, 2017 -
Re: Gray
This was beautiful. I absolutely loved this. Gray is one of my favorite colors, especially with the metaphoric duality of light and dark that it consists of. I love how ...
Jul 25, 2017
