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Knight Dragon, here to review! (Wow this feels so odd since it's not Review Day anymore). First things first. Technical: "Leo’s dad was a famous fighter pilot from The Vietnam ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow the 65th and final Review Day review from this Knight! Technical: "As the wind roared,", this should have a period instead of a comma, or ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a review upon your work on the wonderful Review Day! Technical: "Yes, yes, that cup, from the old curiosity shop. With the keyhole handle and ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Well, that was quite different from some of your other poems I've read. The punctuation was fine, and I couldn't ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! The only technical thing I found to mention was "I enjoy the internet, apples, and mechanical pencils.", the Internet should ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderfully glorious Review Day! Technical: "Deep inside it's cloaks and split streets,", the "it's" should be "its" for the possessive form of that ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this glorious Review Day! Well, I scoured this poem up and down for technical things to note, and I only found two things. "Tell ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "The passing of time, only so much can one take.", you should reword this as "The passing of time, ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this gloriously wonderful Review Day! Technical: "It’s your first glimpse at the person who makes your heart skip a beat Your first kiss with ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "I know it hurts but I know I'm alright.", "alright" should be "all right." I realized after reading through ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: You need punctuation. For example, "Floating without a body Until a scenario is made And into it you are ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this gloriously wonderful Review Day! Technical: "But, look at our end,", you need to change that last comma to a period. And reread that ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this glorious Review Day! I just realized I reviewed this previously, but there are some things I picked up on today that I didn't ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "A million letters to you", I feel that there should be a comma after this line. It's not exactly ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this glorious Review Day! Technical first: "People still remember the day they got married", there should be a period at the end of this ...