Knight Dragon, here to bestow the 65th and final Review Day review from this Knight!
Technical:
"As the wind roared,", this should have a period instead of a comma, or a semi-colon. But I think it flows better with a period.
Otherwise this poem really captures what you're going for with the white snow, and the old man implies white hair, which is a call back to the snow. So are the sheep, with their "snow white" coats of fur, although you didn't call them that. Very good job.
Hope this helps! Happy Review Day!
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