Unforgettable

Knight Dragon, here to review on this gloriously wonderful Review Day!

Technical:
"It’s your first glimpse at the person who makes your heart skip a beat

Your first kiss with the soul who sweeps you off your feet"
You need commas at the end of these lines to help with the reading flow. Those are really cool lines, but they need a bit of a pause between them, which you can do with commas.

"That leave you staring blankly, hoping for a response afterwards", you need a period here.

Note on the ~~~ break lines: those are unnecessary. If you're having trouble with formatting, try typing this up in a Word document in the format you want, then upload that file and replace this existing one. It should fix the problems without having to delve into the code.

Content:
Wow. That was a pretty dramatic ending that took me completely by surprise. It's all happy, happy, SAD....but real. Oh so real. It reminded me of the first five minutes or so of Disney's Up. And I mean that in a good way. That was a really good, but really sad, beginning, and your poem captured that same sort of mentality. Good job, and keep going!

Hope this helps! Happy Review Day!

Hey, Sed here and i am plaesed to have responded to your work. 1st off this is one of those reads where it marinates shore yet it give you so much, you captured the idea of love very well from falling in love, the peak to why, and the out come of loving. Not many people can do it this smoothly you did more than that you owned it. Grate job keep writing look forward to reading about you vision of love. Thank for the read enjoyed it a lot.
From, Sed.

Hi, lyricalrebel here to review your work
Frankly, your poem is fantastic. Why, you may ask? Get this, when I read your poem, I imagined myself staring in the eyes of my boyfriend and whispering my affections to him. And the wedding! God, it has always been our dream! To walk down the aisle arm in arm with your father and your soon-to-be husband's smile welcoming you. I love your poem.
The flow is amazing, showing the arrangement of events in an undying love. I felt the emotions of love reflected through your every words and running down my spine. Thank you...for making me smile
Keep up the good work!

wow. tears. i dont know why but this poem is just so sad. i hope thats what you were going for because if it was then well done. i tip my hat to you. i loved this. the poem started off with happy themes but at the end it was just hartbreakingly sad. i loved everything about this poem. you should totaly 100 percent try and get this published or enter it in a competition. i look forward to reading more of your work and hope you continue writing in the future. omg i just love the line
crumble to a slow melody
its like open to anything. its insperational and heartbreaking and amazing. just well done.
sorry about the spelling by the way.
from alilovessandy