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Re: Sorry
I like that this is so simple. I like that the meaning about this is so straight forward, and foreboding, like it shows what horrible thing the world has come ...
Jan 7, 2015 -
Re: Our World Now: Introduction
I think it is interesting. I like how you showed that that we could probably not survive without technology, but we should use it in limited forms. I also think, ...
Aug 17, 2014 -
Re: Suspective morality
First off I love the message you are giving. I particularly like when you said your very last two lines:) "stop fearing the parts that gave you life.And don't peer ...
Jul 28, 2014 -
Re: The Gun
This is very interesting. I love how you personified the gun to where you made it almost seem alive. It made chills sprint up my arms and my neck. You ...
Feb 12, 2014 -
Re: Flakes
OMGOSH THAT SO SWEET! I t was like I was re-living everything I used to do as a child in the winter. It makes me sad that I dont let ...
Jan 18, 2014 -
Re: I Want To Fall In Love With a Writer
I actually enjoyed this, because I feel the same way! It is beautiful how you wrote this. I would like to repeat this specific section: He may paint the pictures ...
Dec 16, 2013 -
Re: Begging For Liberation
I have one word. Beautiful. That was just so touching it brought tears to my eyes. I love this. You have a great talent to I really hope to see ...
Dec 13, 2013 -
Re: Quotes
I think I get it. You are trying to say that it seems like everyone thinks they have the whole truth or correct facts. But in reality, they are all ...
Dec 13, 2013 -
Re: Darling Day, would you say not?
Wow this is a very sweet poem. I love how you repeat 'Darling day, would you say not?' and 'It is, it is.' . This gives it a nice flow. ...
Dec 10, 2013 -
Re: Into the Light
This was very touching, my favorite part is here when you say: turn around and look back at the path I abandoned, And I wonder to myself: Why did I ...
Dec 3, 2013 -
Re: Can't sleep for the gun beneath my pillow
I am blown away. Heart break, loneliness, tears, all of it is here. This is absolutely stupendous. It shows so much feeling and emotion. I do love the title. It ...
Dec 3, 2013 -
Re: Stand Strong
Wow I love this. It is sweet, sad, melancholy, but full of strength as well. The only amount of criticism I have is maybe try to make the last line ...
Nov 18, 2013 -
Re: Heart of Stone
This is sweet. I completely see where you are coming from. It is like falling in love with the unreachable, the untouchable. I love this half particularly where you say: ...
Nov 18, 2013 -
Re: This Darkness of Mine
wow. This is so deep. It does seem a little depressing, but I like it. There is so muich absolute emotion radiating from it. I could feel myself in the ...
Nov 18, 2013 -
Re: Endless: Part VIII
I CAN NOT WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART. Amazing is all I have to say.I love the thrilland sense of advernture. I love how there is just a bit of ...
Nov 18, 2013